Beginner Rap (from Lil Bro)

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

I rap for listeners my niggas and this beautiful lady
the lady name is hip hop and she want me
to save her from danger from these rap entertainers
she said that aint nothin to her but a stranger
cuz what they spit about is all lies
i listen to her problems so im all eyes
i see what she mean so i guess im all ears
and i couldnt believe it; it brought me to tears
how all these selfish wanna bes only use her for her fame
got me thinkin lifes a bitch and unpleasantness is just apart of the game
but if lifes a bitch then imma fuck wit her no prostitution
its time to start the biggest war like the revolution
　
a few years later hip hops feeling unhealthy
she took a couple shots from a nigga whos stealthy
i rush her to the hospital and its only 1 chance for survival
the world has to be ready for this break through arrival
i gotta become the best these fake niggas have to go
the game filled with lollipop lickin niggas on the low
so i write and i rap everyday to get my name out
a lot more people feeling me so i know im on the right route
or route 44 is what ill never pull cuz im not a gangsta
keepin it real and if im not then im not a rapper
but fuck it on wanna be a rapper im a fucking MC
Lyte-in up this mic with some words from me

[DreezyBaby]

Re: Beginner Rap (from Lil Bro)

Flow: ehhh im a little piffy about it, couldn't follow it quite well
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: got better in the 2nd verse
Overall Lyrics: were okay, could be better bro
Other Notes none
Overall/Rating: 3/5