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    1992 a star was born/
    But um a series of unfortunate events would leave his heart torn/
    He's live's in a cold world so he never new the feeling of feeling warm/
    And it seem has trouble alwas swarmed/
    To his way then he felt like his life was fucked like the girl's porn/
    They say you don't know what you have till it's gone/
    Well shit I hope that true for my mom/
    She left me and my brother to have a blunt and bottle in each palm/
    But she's the one at the end of the day that's gonna feel all alone/
    But I relize something over the year's that I've grown/
    And that's life is too short to hate/
    And don't look down on myself cause it's never to late/
    So I can't just sit around and bitch about my mom I just gotta get up and keep the faith/
    So I grab the bat and step up to the plate/
    Then I hit out the park fuck it I hit it out the state/
    You might on one but what i'm on one time's that by eight/
    as long as I do good God will wait/
    God see's past the lie's so if you fake/
    Be prepared to be eliminate-ted/
    I don't smoke but I got that natural high so everday of my life I'm faded/
    I remeber when my pocket's use to be loose like use pussy now there tight like hair that's braided/
    Before the money none know's you but when you get to the money everone's related/
    To get to this moment you just don't know how long I waited/
    It felt like eternity/
    But it was wroth the wait cause I'm right where I wanna be/
    And it dosent take much all I had to do was keep doing me/
    This is Lyricl homicide you better get a attorney/
    But untill that day So just relax and listen to my journey/

  • #2
    Re: First Step

    Flow: was good overall bro, i liked it
    Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: nice, some of the lines seemed offbalanced tho
    Overall Lyrics: i give lyrics 4/5 seem straight fowarded, from the heart
    Other Notes none
    Overall/Rating: 3.5/5

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    • #3
      Re: First Step

      Flow: was good overall bro, i liked it
      Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: nice, some of the lines seemed offbalanced tho
      Overall Lyrics: i give lyrics 4/5 seem straight fowarded, from the heart
      Other Notes none
      Overall/Rating: 3.5/5
      IT WAS A NICE FLOW FOREAL

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      • #4
        Re: First Step

        good lyrics n i think u should try double rhyming or whatever they call it coz it makes it sound better
        I got ice in my veins, blood in my eyes
        Hate in my heart, love in my mind
        I seen nights full of pain, days of the same
        You keep the sunshine, save me the rain
        I search but never find, hurt but never cry
        I work and forever try, but I’m cursed, so never mind
        And it’s worse, but better times seem further and beyond
        The top gets higher the more that I climb


        the best headshot ever!!

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        • #5
          Re: First Step

          Originally posted by moneymarc454 View Post
          Flow: was good overall bro, i liked it
          Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: nice, some of the lines seemed offbalanced tho
          Overall Lyrics: i give lyrics 4/5 seem straight fowarded, from the heart
          Other Notes none
          Overall/Rating: 3.5/5
          IT WAS A NICE FLOW FOREAL
          why are u copying Dreezy?

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          • #6
            Re: First Step

            Flow: Was Good For The Most Part
            Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: Good Had To Read The Thing Twice Though
            Overall Lyrics: I Say 3.5/5
            Overall/Rating: 3/5
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            • #7
              Re: First Step

              Your lyrics seemed pretty deep 4.5/5

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              • #8
                Re: First Step

                Nice lyrics bro. 4/5

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                • #9
                  Re: First Step

                  It was ok try some multi syllables,and using some more vocab.
                  Shorten your bars up alittle be pretty hard to flow good job though.
                  I look in the flames and see the hotter me.

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                  • #10
                    Re: First Step

                    that is deep man sounds as if it wouldnt be that bad.



                    PROPS GO 2
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                    • #11
                      Re: First Step

                      nice lyrics. but im not sure how it would flow on a song.. but as of a poem base. very well done
                      Talk Stupid Get Ya Head Popped
                      I got that Esther bitch I'm red fox
                      Big B's Red Sox I get money to kill time dead clocks
                      You fuckin with a nigga who don't give a fuck
                      Empty the clip then roll the window up
                      Pussy Niggas sweet You niggas cinnabuns
                      I'm in a red bitch she say she finna cum
                      Two hundred thou on a chain I don't need a piece
                      That Banana Clip let Chiquita Speak
                      Dark shades EazyE
                      Five letter YMCMB
                      Bitch Ass Nigga Pussy Ass Nigga
                      I see you lookin with your lookin ass nigga


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