nothin much 2

[moneymarc454]

I TRY AND FIND WAYS TO REPLACE YOU
I CANT I TRY SO MUCH
ENTERING IN SITUATION I KNOW I RUSH
A CURSE I SEEM TO NOTICE
I TRY AND BRUSH YOU OFF
YOUR PERMANENT TO MY SHOULDERS
CANT RELEASE THE MEMORIES THAT I HAVE
PROBLEMS ADD TO THE MADNESS
YOU LEAVING SUDDENLY, I GUESS YOU PLAN THIS
EVERYNIGHT I SLEEP WITH REGETS
IT WENT FROM HOT SEX, NO TEXT, TO VACANT
YOU SHOT ME OFF GUARD RONALD REGAN
YOU CAME UP WITH EXCUSE ON WHY IT WASNT
TROUBLING ON HOW YOU DOWN CASTED ME
NOW IM STUCK WITH NIGHTMARES FROM HELL.
THE RIGHT PART ON MY BRAIN STALE, STUCK ON YOU
NOW YOU LAY LE GAGIN WITH NIGGAS THAT DONT GIVE A FUCK BOUT YOU.
I SHOULD HAVE LOOK AT YOUR MOTHER BEFORE I LOOKED AT YOU
THE APPLE DONT FALL FAR FROM THE TREE
I GUESS ITS TRUE
YOU KNEW EXACTLY ON HOW I FELT BOUT LOVE
I WASNT NEW TO IT, WASNT USED TO IT
YOU PLAYED FOOLISH SHIT
LIKE AFTER THE GAMES LEFT EMPTY LIKE A COOLER BITCH
I SWEAR I DIDNT MEAN IT
THE HURT I WOULD HAVE DODGE IF I WOULDA SEEN IT
NOW YOU GET DRESS READY TO STEP OUT
AND IM STUCK WITH STRESS LEFT WITH DOUBT
MY FLAWS YOU MANAGE TO POINT OUT
OTHER BOARDS AINT AROUND LONG ENOUGH TO KNOW ABOUT
I CANT EXPLAIN I FELL DRAIN
INVAIN THE PAIN NOW I DONT ACT THE SAME
WHEN A PERSON KNOW YOU GOOD
THAT GIVES THEM POWER
TO TREAT YOU BAD ARE GOOD UNDERSTOOD
I HOPE TO RECOVER FROM THIS CUZ
I REALLY NEEDED TO UNCOVER THIS CUZ
mrcsarrington@yahoo.com

[moneymarc454]

Re: nothin much 2

give me yall honest remarks to this much need. just something i wrote

[MC_Crary]

Re: nothin much 2

Nice rhymes, the rhyme scheme seemed kinda weird at some points but it was good. There were a few multisyllable rhymes, which are always a good thing to include (more complex rhymes). Seems like its from the heart. Rap from the heart is the only real hip-hop.

Also, This is probably gonna get moved or locked. It would go in the writers block section. You gotta read the Studio index, it talks about how you gotta give feedback before posting. Just lettin ya know.

[JSFG]

Re: nothin much 2

You have to give feedback in this section to receive it, and also double posting is against the rules too. Locked.