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  • Imma give this a try...

    I was at my friends house and we where listenin' to Wayne & Ym. When i played him the "new" 30MTNO beat and we decided to write a verse each. Well this is mine and this is the first time I Written down a Verse. P.S i've never smoked weed b4 just tried to describe with the help of what my friends told me

    Rhymes, u got none. Call me cancer cause I'm maiming and claiming ur lungs.
    Move to your brain, ur done, ur dumb.
    I'm André the hun, loved like chinchilla and cinamon buns.
    U feeling the fun, I'm filling my gun, finna lunge, on ur neck like a hickey to some. I
    'm sticky like gum. Can't get rid of me, son.
    And I like hot pussy, so I'm flaming U cunt
    Got Money and im makin' it rain like Young Money
    Wayne's beat but still murcking it with my heat
    Rollin' up the blunt
    Im feelin' this shit, is me at the top
    Im as high as a Eagle, but makin' my girls say my name low
    Im not persuaded by the coppers, weed is legal
    A-N-D-R-É its my name
    Im spittin' this shit as if i where Insane
    Don't mess with my game or ur in the aim
    Don't enter my court, u can't even enter my hall of shame
    Uhh, that's a shame cuz that compared to u, Is Flame
    Im wilder than Tarzan an ur fucking Jane
    Pussy ass bitch, u got nothing to say
    Leave my court Mayne
    Oh, and dont forget to rememer my name

    Any feedback, bashing is welcomed


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  • #2
    Re: Imma give this a try...

    It seems alrite. Its not great though. I didnt like the Young Money line at all

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    • #3
      Re: Imma give this a try...

      haha not to bad some of the lines are good and bad

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      • #4
        Re: Imma give this a try...

        Originally posted by shbasketball12 View Post
        It seems alrite. Its not great though. I didnt like the Young Money line at all
        Ok thanks and yea tbh the ym line was just somethin' i wrote..


        Originally posted by Tuneche View Post
        haha not to bad some of the lines are good and bad
        Thanks Bro


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        • #5
          Re: Imma give this a try...

          The first couple lines were flowing good but it sorta got clustered in the middle. Had some good punchlines too bro, good job for a beginner.


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          • #6
            Re: Imma give this a try...

            Originally posted by YoungTune. View Post
            The first couple lines were flowing good but it sorta got clustered in the middle. Had some good punchlines too bro, good job for a beginner.
            Okey, Thanks for your honesty Bro


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            • #7
              Re: Imma give this a try...

              Its Aight Just Not The Same As An Audio Track
              Some Lines Were Cool Some Lines Weren't But Not Bad.

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              • #8
                Re: Imma give this a try...

                Originally posted by WeezYIsCraaazY View Post
                Its Aight Just Not The Same As An Audio Track
                Some Lines Were Cool Some Lines Weren't But Not Bad.
                Haha yeah i know, Thanks


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                • #9
                  Re: Imma give this a try...

                  I can see that ya're a beginner, but it wasn't bad at all.. Ya had some pretty nice line/metaphores etc. I liked it, but then some of it was pretty bad tbh. a 2.5/5

                  -But like everyone above say: Good for a beginner

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