6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

[UnknownP]

Alright so i saw that Mykill was gonna put together some megamix and got inspired to write on the beat, and since i don't own a decent mic, i knew that writing was as far as this "project" would go. this time it probably was for the best though, the verse turned out less than decent
the first verse i'm posting, but i'll probably post some more in the future, a lot better than this one though!


"they call me mr. hyde, but i don't see why,
but i'mma be me, and let you gentlemen decide
but you bitches better be thankful, unless you want a meeting with jekyll
i don't curse a lot, shit,
but my truth is so true it should be tagged explicit
i've got some problems, but i don't got a bitch to blame them on
dudes on the corner, no one has a swagger like moi,
i know who i am, et toi?`
if you wanna know who i am,
read my shoes or my hat,
fitted says the greatest and shoes say my name,
but i listen to both, i'm true to myself, that something you forgot
as i said, i got that swagger, something you lost,
i'm a beast, in other words, something you're not
i've got those bars, hm, something you want
i speak the truth, something you don't
live life and never let the life live you,
you don't get it but you know that it's true
i'm a beast, shit i already said it
hm, i'm a fresh prince, call me will smith,
not really my scene, so i rewrite the script"


feel free to rate it!

edited version: better or worse?

"they call me mr. hyde, but i don't see why,
but i'mma be me, and let you gentlemen decide
you bitches better be thankful, unless you want a meeting with jekyll
i don't curse a lot, shit,
but my truth is so true it should be tagged explicit
drop the chit-chat baby, i care more about your tits
fools on the corner, no one with a swagger like me
you got three seconds to disappear, one two three
there's two sides of everything, but you've already met mine
if time is money, well then i ain't got time
i might got a couple of minutes, but i'm spendin it on rhymes
i'm true to myself, that something you forgot
i got that swagger, something you lost,
i'm a beast, in other words, something you're not
i've got those bars, hm, something you want
i speak the truth, something you don't
i'm something new, i'm like bluray and you're the dvd,
you can try forever but you'll never could come close to me
i'll take you to the pawn shop, but you bitches ain't worth shit
i am the legend, call me will smith,
this is not my scene, so i rewrite the script"

[russki.]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

"i'm a beast, in other words, something you're not
i've got those bars, hm, something you want"

That's a sick line

It's tight yo
i give it
3/5

[UnknownP]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

thanks dude, i really appreciate it! i know i can do a lot better though, and i will! thanks!

[FuckTheFeds]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

nice flow.. 4/5

unknownp on the beat,
let me see, its kinda sweet,
smokin kush, hippy peace,
im 6foot7foot, yall just pees,
green gets green,
str8 from the tree,
mean mug a nigga, im always ready,
aye, tell me what u need,
look at me wrong, better call the police,
streets get bad, never been worst,
crime rate up, niggas need church,
god help our sins, but it depends,
on who u lend, find a friend,
get ur crew, to defend,
blood bath on the floor the end,

[UnknownP]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

thanks! you're verse goes pretty hard too dude!


I think i'mma work a lil on this today, it might have some potential after all. Might post an edited version later on.

[UnknownP]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

edited version posted on top of the page, but i'll post it here too

"they call me mr. hyde, but i don't see why,
but i'mma be me, and let you gentlemen decide
you bitches better be thankful, unless you want a meeting with jekyll
i don't curse a lot, shit,
but my truth is so true it should be tagged explicit
drop the chit-chat baby, i care more about your tits
fools on the corner, no one with a swagger like me
you got three seconds to disappear, one two three
there's two sides of everything, but you've already met mine
if time is money, well then i ain't got time
i might got a couple of minutes, but i'm spendin it on rhymes
i'm true to myself, that something you forgot
i got that swagger, something you lost,
i'm a beast, in other words, something you're not
i've got those bars, hm, something you want
i speak the truth, something you don't
i'm something new, i'm like bluray and you're the dvd,
you can try forever but you'll never could come close to me
i'll take you to the pawn shop, but you bitches ain't worth shit
i am the legend, call me will smith,
this is not really my scene, so i rewrite the script"

[FuckTheFeds]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

ok here i go again,
double bitches, lookin like twins,
i dont write my shit, i dont need a pen,
but i need the win, drop ur vote in the tin,
sharper then a pin, smokin on kush no seeds and stems,
here goes a hint, go find a new click,
hospital flow, look at all the sick,
flipin my bic, i just let it stick,
if yall are fire, ill just be the wind,

[Wisheezy]

Re: 6 foot 7 foot verse - J.P

Sorry man but you have to posts links to feedback you've given to two people

Rules can be read here:

http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/t14624/

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