RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

[RaYZoR]

Just a few lines on a simple freestyle beat. Again no pre-written lyrics, just on the spot braggin. lol
I know Imma get negative reviews. Don't care though.
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[Young Corruption]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Never listen to you but i've seen you name here every once in a while and honestly i couldn't finished the song cause it didn't sound like you were into it and it made me not be into it as well. the emotion wasn't there and the lyrics were nothing to make me say "oh wow, did he really say that" i know its a freestyle and thats something i can't do or at least for very long(like 8 bars). I thought you would of be better than what i heard but that won't stop me from checking out your next song. just work on emotion cause you were on point for the most part

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Never listen to you but i've seen you name here every once in a while and honestly i couldn't finished the song cause it didn't sound like you were into it and it made me not be into it as well. the emotion wasn't there and the lyrics were nothing to make me say "oh wow, did he really say that" i know its a freestyle and thats something i can't do or at least for very long(like 8 bars). I thought you would of be better than what i heard but that won't stop me from checking out your next song. just work on emotion cause you were on point for the most part

loll. well I guess this explains why I wasn't that into it. this was recorded around 2am and the rest of my family was asleep, I didn't want to wake em up. loll.
also what does it mean "# bars" what's that mean?

[Young Corruption]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

lol i know how that goes with the family and the part about number of bars was me just stating the fact that my input might not means as much since i can only freestyle about that many bars. it had nothing to do with the song lol my bad, should of explained that part better

[DreezyBaby]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

This is pretty cool...but like dude said it sounds like you dont really like rapping lol
your flow is kinda boring, just put more feel into it!
Lyrics: like you said simple but not bad 3
Flow: 2
Overall: 3, just put more feeling into it

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

This is pretty cool...but like dude said it sounds like you dont really like rapping lol
your flow is kinda boring, just put more feel into it!
Lyrics: like you said simple but not bad 3
Flow: 2
Overall: 3, just put more feeling into it

yea I totally feel what you guys sayin. It's kinda ehh....after I heard myself like 2 times

[SiLeNcEd]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Sounds like you're reading it off a paper, make sound like a more of a freestyle.
It also sounds like you're whispering.

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Sounds like you're reading it off a paper, make sound like a more of a freestyle.
It also sounds like you're whispering.

this was on the spot. nothing written. and yea I was whispering, parents asleep at the time I recorded

[Cli-City]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Dude this is horrible if it is written...but if its a freestyle it can pass...you sound like you are whispering a secret.....plus the beat sounds too simple for you to be rapping like that.....for a beat this simple I would've expected a lot of energy and great lyrics.....the only thing I heard was motherfucking motherfucking fucking...rayzor.....

I would rerecord when your parents aren't home so you can go ham.....

[mykill]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Flow: C-
Lyrics: F

Overall: 1/5, You know the mastering on this isnt half bad. If you werent whispering this might not sound half bad. You do realize that you dont have to say "muthafuck" and "fucking" every other syllable to sound good right? I dont normally criticize people's lyrics and all, but damn dude can you say "flower" once in a while? Instead of freestyling everything, maybe take a minute to write something cohesive down and try to rap that. Just an idea.

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Freestyle Beat - Swagger

Flow: C-
Lyrics: F

Overall: 1/5, You know the mastering on this isnt half bad. If you werent whispering this might not sound half bad. You do realize that you dont have to say "muthafuck" and "fucking" every other syllable to sound good right? I dont normally criticize people's lyrics and all, but damn dude can you say "flower" once in a while? Instead of freestyling everything, maybe take a minute to write something cohesive down and try to rap that. Just an idea.

lolll. thanks yeah. There's been more of an improvement on my more recent songs. lol