Serious Feedback Requested

[DMC927]

Had to write just a small one page paper on inspiration for my senior literature class, I know this is no Shakespeare & I only spent about an hour but could I get some feedback from you guys

[Danny M]

Are you looking for feedback about how it sounds, or for punctuation Because it sounds fine to me.

Oh and I love that quote - "Preparation for tomorrow, is hard work today"

First time I've heard it.

[jvg]

too many 'realized' tbh... would replace one of them with 'I began to understand' or something like that.

other than that looks good.

[WeEeEeEzZzZyYy]

this is where you need sportz

[DMC927]

Are you looking for feedback about how it sounds, or for punctuation Because it sounds fine to me.

Oh and I love that quote - "Preparation for tomorrow, is hard work today"

First time I've heard it

If you see anything yea

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too many 'realized' tbh... would replace one of them with 'I began to understand' or something like that.

other than that looks good.

Yea I was feeling that

I like that, thank you .

[Danny M]

If you see anything yea

After the "After finding an interest in the culinary industry" and before the "I", I would place a comma

[DMC927]

After the "After finding an interest in the culinary industry" and before the "I", I would place a comma

Sure as shit not gonna major in English ...

Thank you

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@Danny M

You were gonna let me turn this shit in dated 2012 ??

I just realized this myself

[TheCarter]

[MENTION=72729]DMC927[/MENTION]

Looks pretty good to me jack!