R&B Original - first attempt... feedback? :)

[mp8701]

Hi everyone,

Appreciate any feedback i can get on the following original - its slightly messy and weak, but glad to hear any comments/feedback on this

xxxMeL1SsAxxx's Channel - YouTube

also, here is a link to a play over i did of lil wayne's lollipop - any comments on this?

Lil Wayne - Lollipop - YouTube

Please sub if you like what you hear, and glad to return any feedback if you are in need of any..

thanks heaps xx

[CCB007]

Re: R&B Original - first attempt... feedback?

thats a proper song rite there. proper melody nd chords. keep doin more of this. big rnb artists like ne-yo or mario could easily do a big record wit ur music.

btw is the guitar sampled or VST or did u record it cos its a 5 star sound rite there belee dat

[mp8701]

Re: R&B Original - first attempt... feedback?

Thank u sooooo much.. As it was my first attempt tho, everything but the keys were VSTs.. I'm learning