Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

[Chi-Town..M.O...Y.M]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

[quote=ak_wfb03]

Check it.......... I givez a f#ck who u's friends wit
Who tha f#ks your decendent
Cause murda'z nice with
Gunz, chainsaws and ice picks
Many knife slits, will leave ya chest wide open
Ya chokin, blood evokin, ya girls titty's open
I'm focused, i'm thug provokin, u penny loafin

Sample That People

weak compared to mine, no hating, just serious talk[/quote:3bsi5hye]


harse.... wasnt trynin... but aight

[Enigma]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

When fire was brought to Homo Erectus I damned them
as a leviathan, and there's only one guy surviving man.
See God told Noah that life's flight was down spiralin'
And that I was the one pilotin', fist fightin seraphims
As the world rumbled like horse-drawn carriages
The only way to live is with maternal characteristics
The subjugated population throughout all our ages,
From Barack Obama to JFK and our founding masons,
But see I don't fuck with the irrelevant shit honestly
I spit the truth to cast your futures like magisteries
Leave you questioning yourself in the mirror like Bloody Mary
Like hitting a shot of Everclear it's something daring
HQ's been undermined, this country not steady
This country buried till all that's left is wondering Yeti's
The sun's glare settling as the temperature plummets heavily
Hardening your blood cells so they burst from head to feet
And the frozen water expands till you're bloated like kidney's
But I'll bring back the heat you need, call me antifreeze.
As the tingling settles in with a kick of the amphetamines.
My rhymes turn to hemoglobin keeping the message flowin,
Bringing enough oxygen to have you live through what I wrote in
Because I had spoken and what I was saying? not for gloatin'
I bring you word from the Ark of the Covenant's holdin'
You'll need to devise a plan to counteract demise
That was pre-told in the bible before our time.
So don't sit and wonder what I'm saying, take action
I've already fallen and our hope? Is in your faction.

Any criticism would be appreciated but I don't expect it since nobody gives feedback in here often.
Didn't realize I messed up the flow with a wrong bar..had to edit.

[Artille]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

I would love to give you feedback. Unfortunately to understand your verses you need background knowledge on history, fables, etc. Every time I read your verses I get confused. I am impressed with your logic, but it's just confusing.

[Enigma]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

I would love to give you feedback. Unfortunately to understand your verses you need background knowledge on history, fables, etc. Every time I read your verses I get confused. I am impressed with your logic, but it's just confusing.

There isn't anything to that verse, it's just kind of an ice age happens then I revitalize the world in a way with parts that are prolonged..the terms aren't even difficult, like I think people just read it and look at it and say huh but it's not complex...the hell.

[Artille]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

I would love to give you feedback. Unfortunately to understand your verses you need background knowledge on history, fables, etc. Every time I read your verses I get confused. I am impressed with your logic, but it's just confusing.

There isn't anything to that verse, it's just kind of an ice age happens then I revitalize the world in a way with parts that are prolonged..the terms aren't even difficult, like I think people just read it and look at it and say huh but it's not complex...the hell.

Of course it's not gonna be complex to you when you wrote it.

You have to have background knowledge on some people and events you mentioned to fully understand your verse.

[Enigma]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

I would love to give you feedback. Unfortunately to understand your verses you need background knowledge on history, fables, etc. Every time I read your verses I get confused. I am impressed with your logic, but it's just confusing.

There isn't anything to that verse, it's just kind of an ice age happens then I revitalize the world in a way with parts that are prolonged..the terms aren't even difficult, like I think people just read it and look at it and say huh but it's not complex...the hell.

Of course it's not gonna be complex to you when you wrote it.

You have to have background knowledge on some people and events you mentioned to fully understand your verse.

List what you don't understand in a post and I'll answer it, I'm just curious as to how much you don't understand to the point it doesn't make sense.

[FuckTheFeds]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

i aint in the tourny, but ill warm up the jury,
ill do it for the glory, just another story,
animal like lowry, if u aint from tampa then u dont know what i mean,
im just super clean, murder a niggaz dream, freddy on the scence,
but that was just mean, weed and lean, what a great team,
number one player, top chef mayor, real goon layer,
u a fake ass hater, peace im out later

[Artille]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

i aint in the tourny, but ill warm up the jury,
ill do it for the glory, just another story,
animal like lowry, if u aint from tampa then u dont know what i mean,
im just super clean, murder a niggaz dream, freddy on the scence,
but that was just mean, weed and lean, what a great team,
number one player, top chef mayor, real goon layer,
u a fake ass hater, peace im out later

LOL

Like my boy FuckTheFeds, I'm an animal like lowry too
If you are not from Tampa, I'm talkin bout Lowry Park Zoo
But, I'm just a young white boy from Pinellas Park
Where them toys make noise after it's dark
If you want me you can find me on Maxton Way
North Side, Pinellas, that is where I stay
I don't live in the ghetto, but it's my hood
But if you come trippin, it won't be good

[ak_wfb03]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

weak compared to mine, no hating, just serious talk

You both are fucking terrible are writing.

stfu fagface, get a life, 8000+ posts on a forum. jheeze you ever seen a pussy yet?

[Artille]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

[quote=ak_wfb03]

weak compared to mine, no hating, just serious talk

You both are fucking terrible are writing.

stfu fagface, get a life, 8000+ posts on a forum. jheeze you ever seen a pussy yet?[/quote:2ixgehgq]
lol bro you're wasting your time.....

He's PERMABANNED

[Young Tunechi]

Re: Written Tournament *Warm Up Thread*

Okay just a quick one lol

Ok here we go
Ain't written in a written in a while but ya'll already know
I'm gon' stomp on this beat / ya ears will drown in my flow
Like gas prices i'm high / you bitches Flo Rida low
It's time ya learnt a lesson / off to college you go
I got the world in my hands / an i ain't gonna le' go
Holdin it down nice an tight / like a remote for nintendo
Handcuffs on my wrist / so i dont lose control
Like Missy Elliot, Ciara and the one from JoJo