js11

[js11]

uh huh

ok, hold up. check my rhymes, check my flow
imagine how id sound with a beat so slow
and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like"PO-LO"
haha, my swag so stupid, call me Lilweezyfan
get it? how many people tryna get this nigga banned?
haha just sayin, but homie gotta stop with da stupid shit, not playin
i don't need money, but all i want is ya'll 2 start payin
attention 4 a lil bit, before i leave yur body their layin
nah playing, i aint no killa man
ill michaeljack yo ass, call me thrilla man
im fierceless in da jungle, im part of a gorilla clan!
haha, i pound on my chest like i own this muthafuckka
ill honk on your bitches, as if i was a muthatruckka,muthafuckka
my brain works differently
treat women so GENT-A-LLy
need a book, and a pencil to prepare mentally
boy, im on a different level, your on beginner stage
im done with da book, your on tha beginning page
crush wakk niggas, like im on steroid rage




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[YoungMoneyEnt]

Re: js11

uh huh

ok, hold up. check my rhymes, check my flow
imagine how id sound with a beat so slow
and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like"PO-LO"
haha, my swag so stupid, call me Lilweezyfan
get it? how many people tryna get this nigga banned?
haha just sayin, but homie gotta stop with da stupid shit, not playin
i don't need money, but all i want is ya'll 2 start payin
attention 4 a lil bit, before i leave yur body their layin
nah playing, i aint no killa man
ill michaeljack yo ass, call me thrilla man
im fierceless in da jungle, im part of a gorilla clan!
haha, i pound on my chest like i own this muthafuckka
ill honk on your bitches, as if i was a muthatruckka,muthafuckka
my brain works differently
treat women so GENT-A-LLy
need a book, and a pencil to prepare mentally
boy, im on a different level, your on beginner stage
im done with da book, your on tha beginning page
crush wakk niggas, like im on steroid rage




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LOL the lilweezyfan line is funny as hell
Props nigga

[js11]

Re: js11

uh huh

ok, hold up. check my rhymes, check my flow
imagine how id sound with a beat so slow
and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like"PO-LO"
haha, my swag so stupid, call me Lilweezyfan
get it? how many people tryna get this nigga banned?
haha just sayin, but homie gotta stop with da stupid shit, not playin
i don't need money, but all i want is ya'll 2 start payin
attention 4 a lil bit, before i leave yur body their layin
nah playing, i aint no killa man
ill michaeljack yo ass, call me thrilla man
im fierceless in da jungle, im part of a gorilla clan!
haha, i pound on my chest like i own this muthafuckka
ill honk on your bitches, as if i was a muthatruckka,muthafuckka
my brain works differently
treat women so GENT-A-LLy
need a book, and a pencil to prepare mentally
boy, im on a different level, your on beginner stage
im done with da book, your on tha beginning page
crush wakk niggas, like im on steroid rage






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LOL the lilweezyfan line is funny as hell
Props nigga

haha thanks bro

[weezyavelli]

Re: js11

I actually like it !

But ..

ok, hold up. check my rhymes, check my flow
imagine how id sound with a beat so slow
and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like"PO-LO"

The first 3 lines flows with each other but the last one dont quite match in , if u know what i mean

If u instead filled it so it was almost the same lenght as the other line , fore exampe :

and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like a nice "PO-LO"

Just my opinion



oh and btw that lilweezyfan line killed me , hahahah a

[MissDrizzy]

Re: js11

I actually like it !

But ..

ok, hold up. check my rhymes, check my flow
imagine how id sound with a beat so slow
and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like"PO-LO"

The first 3 lines flows with each other but the last one dont quite match in , if u know what i mean

If u instead filled it so it was almost the same lenght as the other line , fore exampe :

and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like a nice "PO-LO"

Just my opinion



oh and btw that lilweezyfan line killed me , hahahah a

I second that.
I liked it. But another thing I would've done different is:

boy, im on a different level, your on beginner stage
im done with da book, your on tha beginning page

For the second line, I'd have said "I'm done with tha book, you still on tha 1st page."
But that's just my OCD kickin in haha.
Anyways... good stuff

[koolkiddale13]

Re: js11

uh huh

ok, hold up. check my rhymes, check my flow
imagine how id sound with a beat so slow
and some kush smoked up, damn my eyes so low
my shit be stylin, like"PO-LO"
haha, my swag so stupid, call me Lilweezyfan
get it? how many people tryna get this nigga banned?
haha just sayin, but homie gotta stop with da stupid shit, not playin
i don't need money, but all i want is ya'll 2 start payin
attention 4 a lil bit, before i leave yur body their layin
nah playing, i aint no killa man
ill michaeljack yo ass, call me thrilla man
im fierceless in da jungle, im part of a gorilla clan!
haha, i pound on my chest like i own this muthafuckka
ill honk on your bitches, as if i was a muthatruckka,muthafuckka
my brain works differently
treat women so GENT-A-LLy
need a book, and a pencil to prepare mentally
boy, im on a different level, your on beginner stage
im done with da book, your on tha beginning page
crush wakk niggas, like im on steroid rage






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LOL the lilweezyfan line is funny as hell
Props nigga

haha thanks bro

Damn dude your crazy!!!!