Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

[xwiley22]

this is my new song of my champion mixtape. please give me feedback



http://www.megaupload.com/?d=48ZDXR1Y

heres my site for music. add me. myspace.com/youngrockstars2295

[xwiley22]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

Anything ?
I can't get better without feedback

[MC_Crary]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

"goin in like 6 feet deep"

Great line
I like the song, youre pretty good to be 14. One thing that would help though is it sounds like you try to fit to many words into some of your bars, which has you trying to keep up with the beat. Try to make sure when you write, each word fits, so youre not rushing to get every word out. Lyrics are still great though.

[xwiley22]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

"goin in like 6 feet deep"

Great line
I like the song, youre pretty good to be 14. One thing that would help though is it sounds like you try to fit to many words into some of your bars, which has you trying to keep up with the beat. Try to make sure when you write, each word fits, so youre not rushing to get every word out. Lyrics are still great though.

will do thanx

[Gilliedakid]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

"goin in like 6 feet deep"

Great line
I like the song, youre pretty good to be 14. One thing that would help though is it sounds like you try to fit to many words into some of your bars, which has you trying to keep up with the beat. Try to make sure when you write, each word fits, so youre not rushing to get every word out. Lyrics are still great though.

I co sign that line... over all i give the track 6/5. Which exceeds the standards. rhymes.
download worthy

[xwiley22]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

"goin in like 6 feet deep"

Great line
I like the song, youre pretty good to be 14. One thing that would help though is it sounds like you try to fit to many words into some of your bars, which has you trying to keep up with the beat. Try to make sure when you write, each word fits, so youre not rushing to get every word out. Lyrics are still great though.

I co sign that line... over all i give the track 6/5. Which exceeds the standards. rhymes.
download worthy

thanx guys i thought it was alright but i needed others opinion

[Jamerson]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

youngin'
good flow. nice lines bro keep it up, try to tune up the vocals/beat a little
also if u want feedback make sure you give feedback too

[xwiley22]

Re: Young Zay New Song(please give feedback)

Oh ok nd thnx for the tips