Verse1 - Untitled

[THA GR8 M8]

My flow so sweet, well get ya hand out the snack box
I been to hell and back, motherfucker im that hot
And they say i cant flow cause my skin looks like crack rocks
But yall lookin' at a legend in the making, take a snap shot
I dont be chillin in the trap spot, thats truth there
Wanna do a couple shows with my crew thereeee
Look out in the crowd and see im doin' something for the youth there
Try make a name of myself, well i guess thats proof there

Something short! Havent done a written on HQ in a good minute.

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[Jamerson]

Re: Verse1 - Untitled

Flow: i got the flow, it was ok
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: GOOOOOOD
Overall Lyrics: nice short verse
Overall/Rating: 4/5

[Artille]

Re: Verse1 - Untitled

Flow: I liked the flow. You seemed to stick with the same flow all the way through

Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: Pretty good similes and metaphors haha.

Overall Lyrics: Pretty good lyrics overall, but I dislike when people use the same word to rhyme more than once like ending every bar with man. Sometimes it works (like with the N-word), but not always.

Overall/Rating: Good short verse with good bars. The last couple ruined it for me though in all honesty. 3/5

[YoungMoneyEnt]

Re: Verse1 - Untitled

Flow: The flow was a little off to me. It seemed to be a little hard to read.
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: they were decent. A couple good ones
Overall Lyrics: I think you could of done better but it was ok.
Overall/Rating: 3/5 You could of came harder but it was still decent.

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

Re: Verse1 - Untitled

Flow: The flow was A Little Of Not To The Point Where I had To Go Back And Read Though
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: I Like The First Line The Best
Overall Lyrics: Could HaveBeenBetter But Eh
Overall/Rating: 3.5/5

[ProBitaz.]

Re: Verse1 - Untitled

Flow: Hmm, it was okay, but not the best it went on/off a little...
Metaphores/Punchlines: They where okay, some of em where nice, other where "just okay"
Overall: Nice rap, but not the best 2,7/5

[DreezyBaby]

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Flow: yeah it was pretty simple, easy to get, nice rhythm
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: good, you got some good ones every once ina while.
Overall Lyrics: nice, 3rd & 4th bar were my fav.
Other Notes none
Overall/Rating: 3.5/5