short little rap...

[ProBitaz.]

This is named Famous Fame and it's just some ideas that I just put together to a little verse.

I’m an addict to attics cause I like to be on top, not like sex, more like rap and hip-hop, let me hop over you ‘till “drop” cause you’re also an addict, I know I’m sick, but not quite-like-that-sick, -that shit, -is nothing for me, the fame is my drug and I get it for free, and I don’t wanna be a clown like “IT”, that I know for show’, and this album slash CD is gonna blow, it’s gonna sell like dough, it’s gonna grow like “Green”, and green like go. Hold’ up. Like stop. It’s going to fast, this isn’t a whole verse, it’s just an outkast.

feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...spiration.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...-no-title.html

[Jamerson]

Re: short little rap...

wheres the last 2 feedback posts in format in the past 24hrs? #lock

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

Re: short little rap...

This is named Famous Fame and it's just some ideas that I just put together to a little verse.

I’m an addict to attics cause I like to be on top, not like sex, more like rap and hip-hop, let me hop over you ‘till “drop” cause you’re also an addict, I know I’m sick, but not quite-like-that-sick, -that shit, -is nothing for me, the fame is my drug and I get it for free, and I don’t wanna be a clown like “IT”, that I know for show’, and this album slash CD is gonna blow, it’s gonna sell like dough, it’s gonna grow like “Green”, and green like go. Hold’ up. Like stop. It’s going to fast, this isn’t a whole verse, it’s just an outkast.

feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...spiration.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...-no-title.html

i like it the flow to me was kinda Wayne-Ish Though Or Maybe It Was Just How I Was Reading It

Flow: Like I Said Reminded Me Of Wayne So Id Say It Was Great
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors:1st Line Is Hot Really Made Me Wanna Read The Rest
Other Notes: Didnt Really like The Paragraph Style
Overall/Rating:3.0/5

[Jamerson]

Re: short little rap...

okay now that the links are up, ima give feedback

flow - nice.. i just had to re read it bc it wasnt in bars
punchlines/metaphors/similes - pretty good over all
other comments - next time make it into bars.. not like a paragraph
overall - 3.5/5

well done, drop the full verse soon

[ProBitaz.]

Re: short little rap...

thanx for all the feedback ^^

[KrispyKreme]

Re: short little rap...

This is named Famous Fame and it's just some ideas that I just put together to a little verse.

I’m an addict to attics cause I like to be on top, not like sex, more like rap and hip-hop, let me hop over you ‘till “drop” cause you’re also an addict, I know I’m sick, but not quite-like-that-sick, -that shit, -is nothing for me, the fame is my drug and I get it for free, and I don’t wanna be a clown like “IT”, that I know for show’, and this album slash CD is gonna blow, it’s gonna sell like dough, it’s gonna grow like “Green”, and green like go. Hold’ up. Like stop. It’s going to fast, this isn’t a whole verse, it’s just an outkast.

feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...spiration.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...-no-title.html

It was all great, awesome lines and everything that are good.

[xCORRUPTIONx]

Re: short little rap...

Really entertaining. Nice attempt!

[DreezyBaby]

Re: short little rap...

flow - It was pretty good bro
punchlines/metaphors/similes - Nice, couldn't complain, keep flow like this
other comments - yeah didn't like the format you put it in
overall - 3.2/5 XD

[YoungMoneyEnt]

Re: short little rap...

You gotta write in bars bro.
It's a must.