Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

[Title: Lies]

[Verse: Nefu]
I Hate Bein Lied To So Thats Probably Why I Lie Too
Been Lied To For So Long Now I Am Just A Liar Too
But This Is Not About Me This Rite Here About You
Why You Always Lied To Me And Never Left Me With The Truth
You Know Who Im Talkin To This Whole Verse About You
A Story Bout A Liar And How Your Lies Really Hurt People
I Treated You Like A Hero And All You Did Was Hurt Me Doe
Pushed Me Down Picked Me Up So Trusting Is An Issue So
Why Couldnt You Just Tell The Truth So We Could Be Better Off
Its Your Fault Im Like This After Hearing All Your Lies Bitch
The Mouth Is Like A Finish Line With Lies Waiting To Cross It
So Before You Start To Lie To Me Just Stop It

[Chrous:Nefu]
I Believed Your Lies
You Looked Me In My Eyes
But You Never Cared For Me
You Were Jus Lyin To Me
Why Cant U Tell The Truth
I Never Lied To You
But You Would Still Lie To Me
Why Did You Lie To Me
Why?

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[Jamerson]

Re: Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

read the new rules at the top of tha studio bro, or this is gonna get locked soon .

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

Re: Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

read the new rules at the top of tha studio bro, or this is gonna get locked soon .

I Have All The Requirements Now To Keep This Up Now Dont I?

[Artille]

Re: Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

Yes you meet the requirements. Make sure you follow the feedback format in the rules next time though so that people can know all your thoughts and get constructive criticism.

Will edit with feedback soon

EDIT: Here's my feedback, I saw that I posted in this thread and figured that I gave my feedback already.


Flow: You seemed to have a really good flow at the beginning, but towards the end it started to fall apart a little bit.
Punchlines/Metaphors/Similes: Not many in here, but you had good wordplay especially at the beggining.
Overall Lyrics: I think you kept the same message throughout the entire verse and I could feel the emotion. I even sung the chorus.
Other Notes: Try to keep the same flow throughout the entire verse. You changed towards the middle and out through the end. Also, your lyrics sent a message, but the rhyming was kind of weak. You rhymed the same word too many times and that can ruin a verse.
Overall/Rating: 3/5

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

Re: Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

No Feedback????

[Artille]

Re: Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

My bad, go check my last post for some in depth feedback and my honest opinion.

[WeezYIsCraaazY]

Re: Lies (Drake - Fear Cover)/

Its Good With Lyrics But The Word Lie Was Used A LittleToo Much