"It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

[ProBitaz.]

It's Ya Worst Nightmare

It’s Mount Everest
let’s just say ”never rest”, -cause I confess
that I’m the only winner of this contest
no, not back from the dead, but I’m bringing the dead back
so if you will, then just call me 2pac
yeah, I’m white like light
but on the inside I’m the black Coca-Cola
no hip-hop wasn’t dead just lying in coma
Then I bring it back, first place with hard base
I’m not dead, but I’m drowning in sound waves
hoist the flag, I’m all about money and a staircase
keep stepping up try to reach the first base
but just in case, that you maybe forgot
no I’m not melting, but damn I’m hot, damn you not
you all gone, my lyrical sickness, made you numb
I get a thumb up, you get a tomb down
Fuck off Larry King cause you know it’s my crown
I’m right here making all the killer-sounds that makes you deaf
Goodbye you smart-ass cause you’re good as dead
and wet like sweat
okay I’m sorry, for not making any sense
Don’t be sorry if you can’t see me, go buy a lens
but if you blind it don’t matter you’ll still hear me
here you got a new rap-record, it’s yours sincerely
and it’s right here
it’s ya Worst Nightmare, so lock your doors
close your windows
and be aware!

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[xCORRUPTIONx]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

Flow: 3/5
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: 5/5
Overall Lyrics: 5/5
Other Notes: Amazing punchlines, when you said "for don't" you should of said "for not". Typo? Overall amazing.
Overall/Rating: 5/5

[KrispyKreme]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

You used 2pac so it sounds like pack you dumb fuck.

Don't making any sense, yea you don't be making sense.

[ProBitaz.]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

You used 2pac so it sounds like pack you dumb fuck.

Don't making any sense, yea you don't be making sense.

-Just leave this place if you doesn't have some nice to say...

[ProBitaz.]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

Flow: 3/5
Punchlines/Similes/Metaphors: 5/5
Overall Lyrics: 5/5
Other Notes: Amazing punchlines, when you said "for don't" you should of said "for not". Typo? Overall amazing.
Overall/Rating: 5/5

Thanks bro!

[Young Mula Baaaby]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

It's Ya Worst Nightmare

It’s Mount Everest
let’s just say ”never rest”, -cause I confess
that I’m the only winner of this contest
no, not back from the dead, but I’m bringing the dead back
so if you will, then just call me 2pac
yeah, I’m white like light
but on the inside I’m the black Coca-Cola
no hip-hop wasn’t dead just lying in coma
Then I bring it back, first place with hard base
I’m not dead, but I’m drowning in sound waves
hoist the flag, I’m all about money and a staircase
keep stepping up try to reach the first base
but just in case, that you maybe forgot
no I’m not melting, but damn I’m hot, damn you not
you all gone, my lyrical sickness, made you numb
I get a thumb up, you get a tomb down
Fuck off Larry King cause you know it’s my crown
I’m right here making all the killer-sounds that makes you deaf
Goodbye you smart-ass cause you’re good as dead
and wet like sweat
okay I’m sorry, for not making any sense
Don’t be sorry if you can’t see me, go buy a lens
but if you blind it don’t matter you’ll still hear me
here you got a new rap-record, it’s yours sincerely
and it’s right here
it’s ya Worst Nightmare, so lock your doors
close your windows
and be aware!

Feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...lind-love.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...spiration.html

Man that was good

[Jamerson]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

flow - was good, off sometimes but still decent. 3/5
Punchlines/Metaphors/Similes - they were okay.. some good ones, some okay .. i didnt like the 2pac one. 3.6/5
Other - bettter flow, and some better lines would be great.. but your on the right track, keep it up

3.5/5

[ProBitaz.]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

flow - was good, off sometimes but still decent. 3/5
Punchlines/Metaphors/Similes - they were okay.. some good ones, some okay .. i didnt like the 2pac one. 3.6/5
Other - bettter flow, and some better lines would be great.. but your on the right track, keep it up

3.5/5

Thanx Bro!

[KrispyKreme]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

-Just leave this place if you doesn't have some nice to say you f**** gay, go away, you're gone, but i'm gonna stay -bitch it's bomb away! you're cum delay, so fuck you go get you pay-check
and check out!
PEACE!!

huh? my cum delays, oh and you fuck me and go get you pay-check...I'm guessing you don't go to school..or you're just a dumbass, well I mean you're a dumbass regardless but this is pushing the limits. Anyone telling you this is good is..let's say it's to make you feel good.

[PrizeBeatz]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

Flow:3/5
punchlines:4/5
overall lyrics:4/5
other notes: because of how you wrote it on the screen, it was a little confusing for me to separate the rhymes sometimes.
Overall rating:3.5/5

[MikeeFuckinCrazy]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

Yea yur qarbaqe bro.

[ProBitaz.]

Re: "It's Ya Worst Nightmare!"

Yea yur qarbaqe bro.

Hmm .. Others don't think that, so maybe your the one that's garbage bitch..