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  • Redeemed (By A Soldier)

    REVIEW 1: http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...nightmare.html
    REVIEW 2:http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...lind-love.html

    [Verse 1]:
    There was a young boy named Chris and his story went a little like this...
    Young Chris went to school one day and get humiliated by a little Miss...
    He got stiff and lost his cool, he ran out and saw the light and lost the fool...
    The light grabbed his heart and inspired his life, and he ran into a Juve and he told him whats right...
    He was taken and when he was taken to his new home his was shaken..
    He thought he was about to collapse but he told them that he'd rather run laps in the gym class but they told him that they were about to smash the streets...

    [Verse 2]:
    Young Chris forgot the light after he was told the fake story of life and then his personality changed and started doing what wasn't right....
    His mom was searching the country for him, a soldier she was, and she did showed the women she was....
    The day Chris' mom found him on the streets after he had some pounds to eat with his new personality she held him tight and brought him back the good life...

    [Verse 3]:
    When Chris finally realized where he was last, he faced his head toward God and couldn't thank him enough that he was blessed but he it seemed as if he was upset but those were just the tears of "just-come-to-get" of life.

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    Re: Redeemed (By A Soldier)

    Flow: 2.5/5
    Metaphores/Punchlines: naah, not very good..
    Overall: 2.0/5

    I didn't like the concept, so that's maybe why...

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