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    Here is just a verse i quickly recorded today... couldnt think of a name lol. i wasnt thinking of dropping it but w|e you guys haven't heard me alone in a minute. I did this all at once, without stopping so some words might sound a little weird haha.. but w|e check it out. #not final version for sure

    Jay Tunes - Just a Verse


    Yoo, just something quick for ya. Still goin in tho.
    Im tryna do it right, try to kill another song
    Been on this shit for 2 months, you know its not that long
    Whenever I fall down, I comeback really strong
    But I cant do shit alone, please follow me along
    Feeling better everyday, nice flow and word play
    finna rap my own way, you don’t like it that’s okay
    Bring rappers on tray, or should I hit the buffet
    And I don’t drool I spit, punchlines ready, take a hit
    Im about to run this shit, and im so fit
    Sick shit right here, bring your first aid kit
    And no where not the same, cause im spitting flame
    Youre rapping for the fame, im rapping for the game
    While youre being a lame, to the top ima try to aim
    And while you sound the same, my flows gonna be insane
    Didn’t think I’d be where im at, it feels like im at the top
    But some look me up and down, some try to bring me down,
    Some dig the way I sound, some say that im profound
    But I just say what I mean, I am a rapping machine
    Good verses with different kinda flows in between
    Im doing this for me, myself, and I, Im looking at the sky
    Im so ready to fly, leaving the losers behind
    Goodbye, Just live your life, like T.I.
    And im here to stay, put the tunes after the jay
    That’s my name, and ima be myself every mothefuckin day



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    Last edited by Jamerson; 06-30-2010, 04:42 PM.

  • #2
    Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

    Flow: Good, sounds normal, like change it to wear it fits you, sounds like you just wanted to get the song over
    Lyrics: nice cuhz
    Other: nothing really, kinda felt like you were falling off at some points
    Overall: 3.5/5

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    • #3
      Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

      nice lyrics bro
      Check my beats out on : www.soundclick.com/tmzbeatz. T-M-Z on the muthafuckin' beat!

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      • #4
        Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

        I like this bro, good stuff, im amazed how fast you've learned.

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        • #5
          Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

          I for one thought the lyrics were awesome brah...don't let nobody stop you son, but in terms of flow, it coulda been better, but still you sounded real good maine

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          • #6
            Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

            not bad, not getting the flow completely though.
            I'm the master of the simile, started at the bottom then I rose like emily.

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            • #7
              Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

              i was feeling a lil ehh abt the flow too, dont worry ima re-record this
              thanks for the feedback.
              Last edited by Jamerson; 07-01-2010, 12:32 PM.

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              • #8
                Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

                Flow was off alot to me. Lyrics were nothing was too special imo. Had a little message though. 2.5/5



                protect dunston at all costs

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                • #9
                  Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

                  Flow: Changed throughout the rap, it was ok.
                  Lyrics: Average, more punchlines
                  Other: It did have a little story as YF said

                  Overall: D-


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                  • #10
                    Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

                    Originally posted by Jamerson View Post
                    Here is just a verse i quickly recorded today... couldnt think of a name lol. i wasnt thinking of dropping it but w|e you guys haven't heard me alone in a minute. I did this all at once, without stopping so some words might sound a little weird haha.. but w|e check it out. #not final version for sure

                    Jay Tunes - Just a Verse


                    Yoo, just something quick for ya. Still goin in tho.
                    Im tryna do it right, try to kill another song
                    Been on this shit for 2 months, you know its not that long
                    Whenever I fall down, I comeback really strong
                    But I cant do shit alone, please follow me along
                    Feeling better everyday, nice flow and word play
                    finna rap my own way, you don’t like it that’s okay
                    Bring rappers on tray, or should I hit the buffet
                    And I don’t drool I spit, punchlines ready, take a hit
                    Im about to run this shit, and im so fit
                    Sick shit right here, bring your first aid kit
                    And no where not the same, cause im spitting flame
                    Youre rapping for the fame, im rapping for the game
                    While youre being a lame, to the top ima try to aim
                    And while you sound the same, my flows gonna be insane
                    Didn’t think I’d be where im at, it feels like im at the top
                    But some look me up and down, some try to bring me down,
                    Some dig the way I sound, some say that im profound
                    But I just say what I mean, I am a rapping machine
                    Good verses with different kinda flows in between
                    Im doing this for me, myself, and I, Im looking at the sky
                    Im so ready to fly, leaving the losers behind
                    Goodbye, Just live your life, like T.I.
                    And im here to stay, put the tunes after the jay
                    That’s my name, and ima be myself every mothefuckin day



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                    This is just a verse that you killed! Downloaded to my harddrive. You did yo thang shit was unprecedented. fuck what Dreezy Baby
                    5/5

                    I'm so ready to fly... just livin my life like T.I.
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                    • #11
                      Re: Jay Tunes - Just a Verse

                      Finally man been waiting to hear something new from you for awhile.

                      Flow: Good, but I know it could be better (I'm sure it'll be right after you redo it)
                      Lyrics: Nice rhyme scheme. Youre gettin good bro.
                      Overall: 3/5 Just because youre redoing it. Im sure my rating on the final will be better. When you droppin that next tape.

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