Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

[JayReal21]

YouTube - Jay Real Feat. B Eazy - All The Way Turnt Up Remix

please give me feedback on the first TWO verses. tell me how to improve. thanks yall

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[morphineroberts]

Re: Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

"I'm the shit and the ass
just face it!"

You did yo thing, pimpin.
I'm feelin this.

2nd verse was my shit

5/5

[JayReal21]

Re: Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

"I'm the shit and the ass
just face it!"

You did yo thing, pimpin.
I'm feelin this.

2nd verse was my shit

5/5

thanks man i really appreciate it,
swag it out

[Pestrator]

Re: Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

they aint bad bro ur flow was on point n so were lyrics u just sound like u need more experience n liek to put more emotion in ur raps n better quality but u got talent so keep practicing bro

[JayReal21]

Re: Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

they aint bad bro ur flow was on point n so were lyrics u just sound like u need more experience n liek to put more emotion in ur raps n better quality but u got talent so keep practicing bro

thanks for the compliments and advice cuhz. my voice isnt deep as it will be haha a lot of people dont like my raps cuz of my voice but im gonna start putting more emotion into it

[JMSN]

Re: Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

Flow: 3/5: not bad flow, but it fell off quite a bit. try to practice your verse atleast 20 times before you record, find the right flow!
Lyrics: 4/5: your lyrics are good, just need the flow to go with it man!
Overall: 3.5/5

[JayReal21]

Re: Jay Real - All The Way Turnt Up

Flow: 3/5: not bad flow, but it fell off quite a bit. try to practice your verse atleast 20 times before you record, find the right flow!
Lyrics: 4/5: your lyrics are good, just need the flow to go with it man!
Overall: 3.5/5

thanks man for the advice im gonna really work on my flow and then my songs will be much better