Sentus- The Slaughter

[Sentus]

This is a track for one of my bro's albums. He has the chorus and the third verse but I don't have his vocals so this is just my part. I'm new here so I'd like to know what yall think.



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http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...h-so-cold.html
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[MC_Crary]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

Sell like lightbulbs in an amish community is a nice punchline

Flow: Nice flow you got a cool voice. Where ya from?
Lyrics: The lyrics were good. You had some nice multies.
Other: Good track, I would like to hear the full. Welcome to the forums dude. Oh and I think you kinda sound like Chris Webby.

4/5

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

Thanks for the feed. I'm from Ohio lol, most boring state ever, but also home to Copywrite.

And I don't know who Chris Webby is lol

[DreezyBaby]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

Flow: was nice man, no doubt. I wanna hear from you
Lyrics: dope ass punchlines
Other: none man, you good
Overall: 4/5

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

Thanks man, appreciate it.

[youngtalent]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

Flow: great flow
lyrics: nice lyrics. i like that alaskan cabins line
Overall: 4/5

[chapweezy]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

nice shit bro
i like the flow and the beat is pretty dope too, keep up the good shit.

[Pestrator]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

sick song bro i like ur voice n flow good tuff n sick punchlines keep it up bro
how long u been rappin for??

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

sick song bro i like ur voice n flow good tuff n sick punchlines keep it up bro
how long u been rappin for??

Ummmmm when I made this song I had been rapping for about a month

[mykill]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

The thing about this is, that as far as lyricism is concerned, its great. Punchlines galore, lots of good stuff and what not. But the thing that gives it a slight hic-up is that...its boring. It's good, you're good, but its boring. Delivery is fine, beat is good....but as a collected piece of work, its boring.

I dunno. I look at music sometimes from an entertainer point of view. Like one person could hear "Pretty Boy Swag" and figure Soulja Boy to be a stupid little brat that makes the biggest trash they have ever heard on the radio. But honestly after hearing that song, doesnt it get stuck in your head? To get on a soap box, isnt the point sometimes to make something that's catchy and makes people listen? I dont know why really, but this didnt make me listen. Just sounded like Angry Rapper A talking about how fantastic he is compared to Average Rapper B. I'm not discrediting any bit of it, or saying that every song someone puts out should be on "Pretty Boy Swag" level. I'm just saying in the end it needs to grab me, and make me want to listen.

Playing for the 3rd time, I stopped listening as I was typing this.

3/5

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus- The Slaughter

Haha thanks for the feed . . .