Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ] LOL

[WeezyFcrazY]

3rd song i post, SOME of you may think the hook doesn't go well with my verse
but i felt it was ok, i just loved the beat, Please take the time to listen
and thank you if u do

Link:
LimeLinx - Preview - Shadows3.mp3

Lyrics :

"i was tryna dodge love but it hit me in the heart
tryna avoide hate, it found me from the start
it's so easy to get carried away
when reality hits
this shit gets
so blurry, imma hurry
and connect the dots
racing against my darkside, he got a head start
That Muthafucka ! yeah life's bitch and nasty hoe
so i gotta fuck her
let's face it my mind takes me places
it's so scary being with my own thoughts
i never knew i was this fucked up
i don't wanna know how much i love you
they say i'll never know untill i loose you
but naaaah i ain't bout to loose you
the old me is a used to be
and the new me? get used to him ..."

FEEDBACK:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...w-mixtape.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...l-shut-up.html

[chapweezy]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

it was ight, i think its an improvement actually. I like the hook but you gotta keep working on your flow. Maybe you should listen to other artist on here like THP or Dreezy they be killin shit. Take notes haha but overall it was Ok.

[Pestrator]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

big improvement in my opinion keep it up bro ur flow improved keep workin at it bro i lie the lil effects added keep it up n bro cna u please hok me up with the beat please

[WeezyFcrazY]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

Thanx alot for the feedback and ur encouragement guys
and here u go Pestrator, btw i got most of my beats from soundclick

LimeLinx - Preview - theatomicbeats+shadowswhookftdavigliofreedl.mp3

[Tunechi4Life]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

okay, but try to make the lyric i little more stronger, shit could be fire

[Pestrator]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

Thanx alot for the feedback and ur encouragement guys
and here u go Pestrator, btw i got most of my beats from soundclick

LimeLinx - Preview - theatomicbeats+shadowswhookftdavigliofreedl.mp3

ty bro

[Harry62]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

Yea, emphasize on the vocals a little better and you'll have something. 4.5/5 overall

[WeezyFcrazY]

Re: Young S - Shadows [I just wanna write somthin here to make you notice the title ]

Thanx alot guys