Young Corruption- Be Mine

[Young Corruption]

i was just messing about with effects and i liked the way it sounded. again another quick 1 verse song

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yeah girl will you be mine
you always looking so fine
always losing track of time
cause your always on my mind
just writing this song
you got me so far gone
starting to make a brother go crazy
stepping my game up i can't be lazy
cause i wanna start calling you baby
and this is where i don't know what to do
all i need from you is a small clue
cause baby girl you got me on cloud 9
you always looking so god damn fine
so can i start calling you mine
your the best thing i have ever seen
give my heart a shot of morphine






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[THA GR8 M8]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

Lyrics - Pretty nice, good job. On topic throughout!
Flow - Started off pretty good, and ended pretty good. But in the middle your flow fell off some. I think at the "Just writing this song. You got me so far gone." lines is where it messed up. If you would have just made the words longer, like "Just writing this songggggggggggggg. You got me soooo far gone." it probably would have flowed better!
Other - Already showing lots of improvement bro. Keep it up. And lol @ the feedback links! Lol
Overall - 3/5.

[Young Corruption]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

Lyrics - Pretty nice, good job. On topic throughout!
Flow - Started off pretty good, and ended pretty good. But in the middle your flow fell off some. I think at the "Just writing this song. You got me so far gone." lines is where it messed up. If you would have just made the words longer, like "Just writing this songggggggggggggg. You got me soooo far gone." it probably would have flowed better!
Other - Already showing lots of improvement bro. Keep it up. And lol @ the feedback links! Lol
Overall - 3/5.

yeah i got what you mean about being a little off on that one part. i was gonna send it to this one girl and i want it to be perfect. thanks for giving me the idea on how i can fix it. i'll probably re-record it tonight cause i don't wanna go to school tomorrow since i never did my essay. and i'm glad i'm showing improvement already. was the effects good, bad, or just eh? and ha i was gonna put the links as something else but i don't wanna get in trouble

[THA GR8 M8]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

yeah i got what you mean about being a little off on that one part. i was gonna send it to this one girl and i want it to be perfect. thanks for giving me the idea on how i can fix it. i'll probably re-record it tonight cause i don't wanna go to school tomorrow since i never did my essay. and i'm glad i'm showing improvement already. was the effects good, bad, or just eh? and ha i was gonna put the links as something else but i don't wanna get in trouble

Yeah it wasn't bad though. But like the autotune or whatever you used, it would sound good if you dragged out those words at the end of the lines I pointed out. Cause then you would still be on point with the flow, and the others wouldn't be off. But the effects were nice. If you would have put more emotion it would've probably been better. Like dragging out the words and stuff. But if you wanted to, re-do it, and I bet it would turn out pretty nice!

[Young Corruption]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

Yeah it wasn't bad though. But like the autotune or whatever you used, it would sound good if you dragged out those words at the end of the lines I pointed out. Cause then you would still be on point with the flow, and the others wouldn't be off. But the effects were nice. If you would have put more emotion it would've probably been better. Like dragging out the words and stuff. But if you wanted to, re-do it, and I bet it would turn out pretty nice!

yeah i used a free auto-tune plug-in that i found and also a compressor. drag out my words and put more emotion into it, those will be the things i will work on tonight starting right now. i really want this song to be good so i can send it to the girl i like

[mykill]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

Flow: D
Lyrics: B

Overall: 2/5, You sounded like a robot and I'm not talking about the effects. I think the effects were cool, but what's with that flow? Sounds like a typewriter pecking away. Lyrics were alright but nothing flashy.

[Young Corruption]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

Flow: D
Lyrics: B

Overall: 2/5, You sounded like a robot and I'm not talking about the effects. I think the effects were cool, but what's with that flow? Sounds like a typewriter pecking away. Lyrics were alright but nothing flashy.

thanks for the feedback. i'm just starting out recording. just got a mic 2 days ago. so i'm trying to get comfrontable being on the mic and everything

[mykill]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

thanks for the feedback. i'm just starting out recording. just got a mic 2 days ago. so i'm trying to get comfrontable being on the mic and everything

No problemo. It comes with time, so dont think you can magically be amazing day 3 lol. I can see the potential, just keep at it and I look forward to hearing more.

[Young Corruption]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine

lol yeah i recorded another this morning and i think its sounds better than what i have been soing. will post sometime today

[morphineroberts]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine V2.0

i was just messing about with effects and i liked the way it sounded. again another quick 1 verse song

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V2.0
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yeah girl will you be mine
you always looking so fine
always losing track of time
cause your always on my mind
just writing this song
you got me so far gone
starting to make a brother go crazy
stepping my game up i can't be lazy
cause i wanna start calling you baby
and this is where i don't know what to do
all i need from you is a small clue
cause baby girl you got me on cloud 9
you always looking so god damn fine
so can i start calling you mine
your the best thing i have ever seen
give my heart a shot of morphine






Forum Police:
suck
it

You are targeting the right gender... the bitches
you did your thing on this one.
That morphine line sounded suspicious to me tho
I'm playin
We can collab on something,YC.

[WeezYIsCraaazY]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine V2.0

Quite Cathy In My Opinion Quite Nice Bro. Keep It Up

3.5/5

[Young Corruption]

Re: Young Corruption- Be Mine V2.0

Quite Cathy In My Opinion Quite Nice Bro. Keep It Up

3.5/5

thanks man. i'ma keep trying to get better