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    last thing i'ma drop in tha studio until my mixtape is done. going through a lot the past couple of days and so why not make a song out of how i feel. It is not suppose to be about wordplay and i'm also working on songs where i do my own hook. i need to step up my game
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    (verse 1)
    there use to days when i was happy
    my worlds crashing down, now its crappy
    looking up asking what is really happening
    walking down the street, the shadows are gunning
    always looking back, who is behind me
    when am i gonna die, the clock is counting
    i ain't running from the devil himself
    i looked into his eyes and the devil is myself
    people don't understand what i've been through
    they think everything i say is very untrue
    what do people say when i walk down the street?
    that maybe he looks like a complete deadbeat
    i would be lying if i didn't believe them
    should i end my life? it wouldn't be dumb
    i can already see me burning in hell
    this isn't the last of me, this is never a farewell

    (verse 2)

    everyones wondering if that guy is coming back
    does he even know were is soul is at
    god himself doesn't know if he can save him
    the lights aren't burning he's in a dim
    but yet its not like anyone cares
    cause when he passes by he gets evil stares
    thats why everyone calls him young corruption
    you better watch out he brings a lot of tension
    he ain't no one to start messing with
    everything you heard, yeah they aren't a myth
    you better watch out he has blood in his eye's
    if he's coming for you, you better said your good-byes
    trying to end his life he knew he couldn't
    something inside told him that he shouldn't
    so i'ma leave you with one final thought
    get ready, for his onslaught

    (verse 3)

    i ain't done i got a few things to say
    you don't know anything you just got outplayed
    i lost track of who i really am
    but i'm not going out without a final stand
    look at me i got a lot of power
    but yet it turned me into something sour
    i'm not talking about those sour patch kids
    because when i'm done you can't open your eyelids
    and yeah i'm fine with getting a lot of hate
    i guess somewhere in my genes i needed to mutant
    but hey you never know if its for the better
    i mean look at your girl she hasn't been wetter
    thats what i do, i go for the low shot
    the ones that sting and it shows lots
    but yet now i'm done with my story
    as you can see there is no glory



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    Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

    flow was steady throughout.
    lyrics were decent, and went with the theme.

    just work on the emotion and u good.
    EVERYONE CHECK MY MUSIC OUT, AND PM ME IF U HAVE ANY REQUESTS AND INQUIRIES !!!!!

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    • #3
      Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

      Flow - This was better than the last song. But there is parts when you fall off a bit. At least you normally get back on track after a slip up. Thats a plus!
      Lyrics - They are always on topic. Rhymes are still pretty simple. But I know you're working on that.
      Overall - Good track that shows your improvement. 3.5/5.



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      • #4
        Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

        Originally posted by YUNG DIEZEL View Post
        flow was steady throughout.
        lyrics were decent, and went with the theme.

        just work on the emotion and u good.
        yeah i will work on emotion. thanks for the feedback
        Originally posted by THP850 View Post
        Flow - This was better than the last song. But there is parts when you fall off a bit. At least you normally get back on track after a slip up. Thats a plus!
        Lyrics - They are always on topic. Rhymes are still pretty simple. But I know you're working on that.
        Overall - Good track that shows your improvement. 3.5/5.
        thanks for the feedback. i wasn't really going to complex rhymes cause this was a song i just threw together in about 30 mintues after some shit went down with me and my cousin and her family. But i'ma try to get more complex on my next couple of songs since i'll have time to write
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        • #5
          Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

          u sound like me wen i first started, just keep practicing and ull find ur flow.



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          • #6
            Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

            Originally posted by WKinhere View Post
            u sound like me wen i first started, just keep practicing and ull find ur flow.
            will do. thanks for the feedback
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            • #7
              Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

              Originally posted by WKinhere View Post
              u sound like me wen i first started, just keep practicing and ull find ur flow.
              link me to one of your songs,

              i didnt know u rapped??
              EVERYONE CHECK MY MUSIC OUT, AND PM ME IF U HAVE ANY REQUESTS AND INQUIRIES !!!!!

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              • #8
                Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

                Originally posted by YUNG DIEZEL View Post
                link me to one of your songs,

                i didnt know u rapped??
                http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tra...ome-songs.html

                u commented on it, u prob just forgot. haha
                Last edited by WKinhere; 11-25-2010, 10:07 PM.



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                • #9
                  Re: Young Corruption: No more happy

                  This shit was dope bruh
                  Flow: 4
                  Lyrics: 3
                  you came hard. your flow fits your lyrics perfect
                  Overall: 4/5

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