Bliss - 2 New Tracks

[4747]

Having not posted in ages here's 2 new songs by me. I'm still working on improving and I have slightly broken speakers right now so please excuse the production sounding poor as I couldn't really listen to it over the speakers out loud.

Dark Reality Freestyle
Hulkshare.com Dark Reality Freestyle.mp3

Power
Hulkshare.com Power.mp3


Both tracks to appear on my up-coming mixtape which is a remix of MBDTF. Release date to be announced closer to the time!

Feedback
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post333774

http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post333276

[lilchukieforeheadbig]

Re: Bliss - 2 New Tracks

that accent .................

u from england??

[4747]

Re: Bliss - 2 New Tracks

that accent .................

u from england??

Yeah I am. Wanna elaborate a little on that accent? You like it, you don't like it etc...?

[YoungTune.]

Re: Bliss - 2 New Tracks

Power: Great lyrics, Flow was good..I liked how you changed it up throughout the track..Your accent atually adds to the song. The mastered version sounds alot better.

4/5

Dark Reality: Lyrics/punchlines were on point, Flow seemed a bit off at times though and it sounds like the beat is a bit too high. Other then that it was a good track.

3/5

[4747]

Re: Bliss - 2 New Tracks

Thanks for the feedback bro. I may re-record Dark Reality, that was a one take freestyle and I wanted to keep it as that for now, but if people keep saying the flow seems off I'll re-do it

[Gibbsy]

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For some reason only power will load atm :S , but as it is ill feed that right now, firstly all i can say is it sounds like you got some potential definaly mixing is slightly off, and i definatly feel like you could portray more emotion through your delivery, but overall this track is pretty tight man the bars are nice but sometimes difficult to hear when your recording homie spit it like you really man it and it you yourself will hear the differnce, ima give this a 3.5/5
But thats not negative in any way because i can tell you can do more but keep going on and droppin man !!

[4747]

Re: Bliss - 2 New Tracks

For some reason only power will load atm :S , but as it is ill feed that right now, firstly all i can say is it sounds like you got some potential definaly mixing is slightly off, and i definatly feel like you could portray more emotion through your delivery, but overall this track is pretty tight man the bars are nice but sometimes difficult to hear when your recording homie spit it like you really man it and it you yourself will hear the differnce, ima give this a 3.5/5
But thats not negative in any way because i can tell you can do more but keep going on and droppin man !!

Big thanks man, that's the sort of feedback I really need. I recorded Power after taking a few punches so my face is a bit swollen up, but yeah I'll throw more emotion in to my tracks and make the delivery so much better

[Gibbsy]

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Big thanks man, that's the sort of feedback I really need. I recorded Power after taking a few punches so my face is a bit swollen up, but yeah I'll throw more emotion in to my tracks and make the delivery so much better

Finally Someone Who Take Critism as a posative like me XD aha good on you man yeah i know the next few tracks you make now youll focus alot more on the negatives of previous work an work to out-do on the next song!! one luvv bro!

[4747]

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Finally Someone Who Take Critism as a posative like me XD aha good on you man yeah i know the next few tracks you make now youll focus alot more on the negatives of previous work an work to out-do on the next song!! one luvv bro!

Only time I'll get angry is if someone just turns around and says they didn't like it and won't explain or will say why but won't give me any advice on how to improve what's wrong, ya dig?

Remember to drop that feed for Dark Reality when it decides to load for you!

[tha_chronic]

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lyrics are good on both songs, like previously said the mixing is slighting off sometimes especially on Dark Fantasy I have a problem hearing you. Flow could be worked on better on Dark Fantasy, you slip up sometimes, nothing against the lyrics because they are fine just the delivery ...

Power is mixed better, verse 1 on point lyrics and delivery wise, verse 2 could do with a redo delivery wise at the first few bars and if its possible to make it all a bit clearer it would be really good

anyways bro ..don't know about rating it but i'll go with a 3-3.5/4 ..if you mixed it and mastered it, i think it would even overshadow a bit of the delivery issues but overall with the lyrics being on point it;s definitely a great direction you have taken

[4747]

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Big thanks bro. I am gonna end up re-doing the songs again to make the flow and delivery better on each. But I really appreciate anything that's constructively said because that's the only way I'm gonna end up improving

[THA GR8 M8]

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Dark Reality - Flow was off big time to me. Only a few times when it was on. Lyrics were okay though. Mastering needs work big time.
Power - Flow was better here, still fell off a few times though. Lyrics are nice though, a couple dope lines. Mastering needs work here too.