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  • OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix


    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pOR1SU1Ff_s
    Lyrics:
    Start workin on my sick flow,
    nine to five gotta go,
    this ain't a hobby it's a life,
    marry flow it's my wife, marry juana it's my knife,
    If raps tell fates look out Bill Gates, cause we all look for what awaits,
    But man live life by the minute, be in it, and never give up in it,
    Talk about goin' ham, I'm the stuffing drop it, BAM!
    Start workin on my sick flow, nine to five gotta go,
    This ain't a hobby it's a life, marry flow it's my wife, marryjuana is my knife,
    If raps tell fates look out Bill Gates, we all look for what awaits,
    But man live life by the minute, be in it, and never give up in it,
    I told you Beasley nasty, rep the south, Fuck Cincinnati,
    He goes to his fridge, pops a natty, he sees his rhymes are stale,
    But breakthrough and he causes all hail.
    Thunderstorms erupt, tornados disrupt, and volcanos erupt,
    You think its armagadeon but Beasley bringin 2012 in twenty one one,
    But like a bright-side the sun come up, Life kicks you in the cup,
    Whats up? Fuck up? You givin up?
    All your hopes, all your dreams, it seems you find reality, actuallity says your nothing, But keep going it's something, you might hit that upswing, get a family... wedding ring, I'll be here keepin' it real in Atlanta, I'll be your light like a lantan,
    But goodnight, sweet dreams, it is what it seems, lights go off she screams,
    2 streams fall from her face, praise grace that I come back tomorrow
    Yo tell the world to hold their breath...
    Their breathing the wrong air...
    This world belongs to me and this hippie with long hair...

  • #2
    Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

    sumtin' broke dawg

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    • #3
      Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

      Ehhh, sorry bro, but:

      Flow- 1, I can't give 0's, since the end was kinda/sorta flowin' at times, lol.

      Lyrics- Very scattered, but decent. 3

      Overall: 2/5


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      • #4
        Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

        This was nice. The beat added to the flow alot
        Flow: 3/5
        Lyrics: were good too. different in a good way
        Overall: 3/5 do ya thang man

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        • #5
          Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

          its average, i liked the beat, the start sounding like you were kind of talking? but i give it a 3/5 .

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          • #6
            Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

            Originally posted by DreezyBaby View Post
            This was nice. The beat added to the flow alot
            Flow: 3/5
            Lyrics: were good too. different in a good way
            Overall: 3/5 do ya thang man
            did we listen to the same song?
            the flow was horrible. you need to work on that
            lyrics were the best part
            other than the flow which you need to work on. Your mic sounded weird. If that was an effect you used it was a bad choice.
            i'm not here to hate, just giving my honest opinion on what i heard. just keep working on your flow and mastering
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            • #7
              Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

              k...here's your feedback....
              STOP IT

              That said, here's the detail behind that:

              Flow: F
              Lyrics: D

              Overall: 1/5, You seem to know something about mastering as song. I mean the beat and the effects used were alright, but overall you need to STOP - just as a previously stated. Flow was the same stop and go badness that people usually start out doing, so you need to work on that. Try to remember that for it to sound natural, you have to say it naturally. You're just talking into the mic, so dont try to force a flow for the lyrics you're rapping. Try to talk it out to the beat, if you know what I'm saying. Your lyrics are trash, I say that because you try to write some Lil' Wayne-esque hardcore hip hop stuff over a Em beat. Just write what you know. Dont try to present yourself for something you're not, and write some real shit about Beasley and it'll prolly turn out 100% better than this attempt. Reading the lyrics it seems like you might have went in a bunch of directions, but not really nail down one concept or subject for this verse. Stay focused on one thing and dont ping pong so much when you right. KEEP WORKING ON IT AND YOULL GET BETTER. Yeah, you could call me a hater, but I'm just being realistic.

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              • #8
                Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

                Originally posted by mykill View Post
                k...here's your feedback....
                STOP IT

                That said, here's the detail behind that:

                Flow: F
                Lyrics: D

                Overall: 1/5, You seem to know something about mastering as song. I mean the beat and the effects used were alright, but overall you need to STOP - just as a previously stated. Flow was the same stop and go badness that people usually start out doing, so you need to work on that. Try to remember that for it to sound natural, you have to say it naturally. You're just talking into the mic, so dont try to force a flow for the lyrics you're rapping. Try to talk it out to the beat, if you know what I'm saying. Your lyrics are trash, I say that because you try to write some Lil' Wayne-esque hardcore hip hop stuff over a Em beat. Just write what you know. Dont try to present yourself for something you're not, and write some real shit about Beasley and it'll prolly turn out 100% better than this attempt. Reading the lyrics it seems like you might have went in a bunch of directions, but not really nail down one concept or subject for this verse. Stay focused on one thing and dont ping pong so much when you right. KEEP WORKING ON IT AND YOULL GET BETTER. Yeah, you could call me a hater, but I'm just being realistic.
                word man
                you have to work hard on your flow, you're only speakin in your mic
                this beat got so much feeling, but i missed the feeling in your voice...

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                • #9
                  Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

                  Look, your flow is sooooo wack, i dunno what u can do to improve it.. like first off, you do have a white boy flow (i'm not black btw) and nobody likes a white boy flow and especially if you cannot deliver it properly.. and your lyrics talking about your 'sick' flow as well made me smfh..

                  Flow: 0/5
                  Lyrics: 1.3/5

                  If u still wanna compete in dis game you're gonna need to step up hardcore!



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                  • #10
                    Re: OO Beast Mode - When I'm Gone Verse Remix

                    this shit is based as fucck

                    5/5

                    you original as fuck. flowise and lyrically equipped.

                    dont worry about conforming to everyone else's standards do you bro.

                    that picture of you walkin into the woods based as fuck too, like that lil b video.

                    keep it up bro.
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