J.Santiago:MOVING ON"COMMENT!!!"

[FUTUREOFHIPHOP&R&B]

I once knew a chick that we had a thing but every-time I open up to her I felt like she was slipping away n my mind was gone I didn't think she liked me n thought she started hiding things from me but then I got to know her more n it like my mind took off then came right back in to search 4 love n my heart kept beating like it was building a blood line full with love n then I fell I'n love n I loved heaven above for shining this beautiful grl that right in my eyes n it brighten my whole life *But this wasn't the 1st time I fell I'n love n I actually had love I'n 1st sight once n that was real love n even if we didnt get together I still believe I'll have u one day but I gotta say that every1 doesn't always get what they want so they Feening & hating & jerking off non-stop n that set there mind off n wonder off to find a betta place but they end up being at the wrong place but ya gotta noe that there more fishes to see n they might be BETTA then the one u love so like my ngga drizzy drake said Fall 4 Your type & Find Your Love & like me I'm just moving on & I don't believe that pussy is power just our motivation that turn to inspiration then become "God Power"of the positive thing we do that take away negative power & we gott a big tower that involves at lot of God Prayers so when we move on we get something real special & talented going on & we be killing that shyt

[FuckTheFeds]

Re: J.Santiago:MOVING ON"COMMENT!!!"

bad^^no flow, rhymes didnt rhyme,..

i be movin on..movin movin on,
i be movin on..movin movin on,
i be movin on..movin movin on,

ok next this, next that,
just get my check and thats that,
no questions asked, ill blast you ass,
just pass the cash, born to pack,
yall seem to lack, my life has such a impact,
i drive and dont crash, stash the sack in the dash,
movin real fast,dont think about the past,
just stay ahead, and yall know..

i be movin on..movin movin on,
i be movin on..movin movin on,
i be movin on..movin movin on,

yall stop, my gold watch, go tic tock,
i drop, these bods, at top, yall low,
so what, so cold, still froze,
like snow, str8 blow, like u aint know,
strippers on the poll,legs go down slow,
blunt full of dro, heidi wanna say hi,
hit her 3 times, is this nigga alive?
hes gone, bye bye, red eye, clear eyes,
going to another level, count the measures,
give the lectures, pressure pressure,


i be movin on..movin movin on,
i be movin on..movin movin on,
i be movin on..movin movin on,

[FUTUREOFHIPHOP&R&B]

Re: J.Santiago:MOVING ON"COMMENT!!!"

Look dude RHYEMING ANT NUN EMINEM DNT RHYEM IN HIS SHYT SOMETIDO OF THE TIME JUST CUZ U SEE THE LYRICS DOESNT U COULD JUDGE HOW I SPEAK IT YA ALL STUCK IN THAT RHYEMING SHYT U RHYEM TO MUCH N IM TELLING MY STORY NOT URS

[FuckTheFeds]

Re: J.Santiago:MOVING ON"COMMENT!!!"

ya em dont rhmye alot but..he still keeps a flow going..something u lack..

[FUTUREOFHIPHOP&R&B]

Re: J.Santiago:MOVING ON"COMMENT!!!"

See. Wut wrong w. Ur songz is u sound just like every other artist create ur own flow

[UnknownP]

Re: J.Santiago:MOVING ON"COMMENT!!!"

first of all, don't post your songs if you can't take some criticism.

and the song, naaah, didn't really feel it. as fuckthefeds said, you don't really have a good flow, so you might wanna rhyme a bit more.
but you had some good lines...
i'd give it a weak 2/5...sorry