Rich Breezy-Over & Over & Over (Remix)

[stillfli69]

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Intro:
Ohhhh
Yeah

Chorus:
Keeps replayin' in my head (head, head)
I can't get it out my memory (memory, memory)
But It keeps over, and over, and over, and over, and over again


Verse 1:
I said its B, to the R double E, Z, Y
No alibi, I stay fly till the day that I die
Look up at the stars, on Hollywood Blvd.
I won't ignore the people that got me this far

I sit back and ponder, my mind begins to wander
money's a little greener, and my girls a little blonder
got that louie bag, gucci tag, girls wanna do me bad
ohh she glad, ohh he mad, cause he got that stupid swag

So I think about it over and over again
and he never sober and sober again
What am I to do now?
I guess I'll play the music loud

and turn the volume up real high
and be a champion like eli
I guess they love me cause I'm paid
So throw ya numbers on stage if you tryin' to get laid

Chorus:
Keeps replayin' in my head (head, head)
I can't get it out my memory (memory, memory)
But It keeps over, and over, and over, and over, and over again

Verse 2:
I can't get it out my head, I'll try to see you later
I'm sittin' here chillin', like a kegerator
So she get up on my pipes now, the crowd is gettin' hype now
She all up on my shit but I ain't lookin' for a wife now

But she can't seem to listen
She's askin' other girls if they know what their missin'
so I'm spittin', rippin', tryin to tell her off
Ignorin' what I'm sayin' so I had to rip this song

They won't let me in the party, I promise I won't forget
I'm about to get famous & you bitches ain't shit
I spit all these songs, to prove all these haters wrong
A kid from Kentucky gettin' big before I'm gone
So Long

Chorus (x2)
Keeps replayin' in my head (head, head)
I can't get it out my memory (memory, memory)
But It keeps over, and over, and over, and over, and over again

Bridge:
One time for the city
Two times for yall
One times for the city
Two times for yall
Two times for yall
Two times for yall
Two times for yall
Two times for yall

Chrous (x2):
It stopped playin' in my head (head, head)
Now it's gone from my memory (memory, memory)
It's never gonna play over, and over, and over, and over, and over again

[stillfli69]

Re: Rich Breezy-Over & Over & Over (Remix)

any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

[stillfli69]

Re: Rich Breezy-Over & Over & Over (Remix)

any feedback?!!?! lol

[mykill]

Re: Rich Breezy-Over & Over & Over (Remix)

Flow: A
Lyrics: D

Overall: 3/5, Here's some feedback: You need a new name. Rich Breezy? That's horrible. There's too many -eezy's in the rap game now a days. I bet the reason why no one's gave you any feedback is cause they see that -eezy and say "oh its another one of them". Be more unique. Be different. Give people something that they can't type-cast and maybe you'll get more attention. There's always Dreezy and Breezy on this forum, so if you wanna get some attention in the Studio, change your f'n name. And please, no Lil's.

Anyway, Do you do the rap and the track, meaning you did the chorus and verses right? You have great skills on making harmonized, well mastered hooks. That to me is one of the most important elements of a song. Its like Weezy said once "what you say is most important" and I think a lotta guys fall off cause they dont put in as much work on their hooks as they do their verses. Lyrically I think you need some major work. Read up on multiple syllable rhyme schemes (for instance) and many other aspects of rap then come back with your pen and pad on the next track and try to take it up a notch. Simple rhyming can be just as impact and just as epic as something vicious that Jay or Em comes up with, you just gotta learn more on how to make your lyrics and your punchlines stand out. The song finished about 2 minutes ago, but the only thing I remember is the hook, if that says something.

How's that? More songs plz.