In The Morning Verse Critique and Rate It

[dminor12]

Baby you springtime wet
Scratching, bumping, thumping, this the best night yet,
Took a while to get ya so I gotta come correct,
You took a gamble being with me I�ll make it worth the bet

Excited bout it but I gotta keep my poker face on�all in all in
I can�t swim but I�ll go ahead and dive in
I use to fantasize about it now its realistic
We makin a movie so I�ll know u never ever forget this

I�m jokin, unless you down for it,
You Hollywood so why not star in this production,
Cute face, nice body, and ya voice seductive,
You throw it back like a lateral and u know I love it

Eyes open the next morning what a wild night,
Check the time take a lil sip of the sprite,
Birds chirpin and the rising of the sunlight,
You already know what ima ask right?

[Glen F Baby]

Re: In The Morning Verse Critique and Rate It

It's kinda...a 2/10. All of the lines were kinda beginner stuff and none were really that good. The last line of the first stanza has promise but that's about it. Maybe instead of saying what you said say "Glad you spent your last night with me like you got expensive tastes". Lol it rhymes

[Fouad_010]

Re: In The Morning Verse Critique and Rate It

It's kinda...a 2/10. All of the lines were kinda beginner stuff and none were really that good. The last line of the first stanza has promise but that's about it. Maybe instead of saying what you said say "Glad you spent your last night with me like you got expensive tastes". Lol it rhymes

wtf uz talking about this would go perfect with it. nice job 8/10 bro.

[FuckTheFeds]

Re: In The Morning Verse Critique and Rate It

wasnt that bad, nothin special but this is the best verse i heard from you.. good job.