Premier 1 verse rap

[YM_Flash]

Here is a 1 verse rap from one of my friends in my rap group. Spits pretty hard, first song he recorded. Starts at 50 seconds, remix to wiz khalifa never been

YouTube - Premiere - Never Been ((Remix))

Feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post393486
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...the-sun-3.html

[THA GR8 M8]

Re: Premier 1 verse rap

I know its his first song, but his emotion isn't there. Seems so bored. That kinda ruins the whole mood of the song.

[Sentus]

Re: Premier 1 verse rap

This isn't bad if it really is his first song but his delivery needs a lot of work. He needs to have that thing about his voice that makes people want to listen to him. I won't comment on the lyrics.

[JAYRMe]

Re: Premier 1 verse rap

One tip if your gonna have a song start so late either hype it up or fade in the beat otherwise it really makes the listener disinterested.

[mr.smith]

Re: Premier 1 verse rap

yeah that's why i never wanted it out on youtube anyways because i didn't even wanna record it but i did anyways
but yeah i fucked up on that too, i wasted almost 50 seconds of the beat on exactly that.. the beat hah

[ATLien666]

Re: Premier 1 verse rap

Not bad for a first song.

Flow - 3/5. It's the flow that a beginner cops when they first start rapping; that default flow.

Lyrics - 2/5. But then again, I'm not expecting anything brilliant on a Wiz beat, but it was pretty decent.

Overall- 3/5. Tell him to raise the vocals, and put more emotion in it.