Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

[Sentus]

Yes I know they made me look bad but it only opened my eyes to how bad my quality really is so hopefully I'll be fixing that soon

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I struggle to strive in these ever so cumbersome times
As I'm soaked by the rain cloud that covers the skies
So don't be wonderin why there's no love in these eyes
Cause my heart is one place that it doesn't reside
Trust me, I've done love and I'm done with its lies
That's why you won't find any trust in my life
My faith was lost to the leaves on this path to the dark
For the crows have an unrelenting grasp on my heart
I lost track from the start so I tried to trace ya steps
But all I found where the black feathers of your sacred treck
I was so close to going over I could taste the death
But I slowly fell back to the ravens nest
And now I'm tangled all up in the mangled straw
As I listen to the screech of the angels caw
My face was slashed by her most hateful claw
As I'm broken by the hearts most painful flaw

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[Coleon]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

I'm diggin this

5/5

Keep hustlin

[mykill]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Flow: C
Lyrics: A

Overall 3.75/5, I dont think its that they're better than you, its just they sound more natural on the mic. I think that guy that compared you to Iron Solomon was right: you sound like you're battle rapping someone on every track. That last guy was real nice though. Really good wordplay. Hook needs some better master/singing/delivery. What other forum is this from? You did do a great job writing your verse as usual. Even some good moments away from that battle rap flow in there too.

[KrisJohnson]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Yo, this kinda remind me of Fort Minor? is it just me?

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Thanks mykill

[Gibbsy]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

feelin the beat!! nice flow kinda smooth shit, first guys flow is spot on as far as i can hear, hook has alot of potential maybe a singer on it would be better? but not hating on that coz i cant sing either , 2nd guy sounds smooth flow is sick to an the lyrics , 3rd guys flow is nice!!! yeahh gotta address the wordplay to that is some nice writing!!
over all 4/5 if the hook was tidyed up it would get a 5

[MC_Crary]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

This was a pretty good track. As fars as lyrics you killed everybody else. You always come with great lyrics you just gotta work on your flow and mastering. This flow is good, just overused. Seems like you gotta get more comfortable on the mic, which comes with time. Two things that would help improve your quality qucikly: noise reduction or hiss removal and (I didn't hear it on this track but I usually do) that doubling your voice or chorus effect you use. You should wait until you get a better mic to do that because the hiss in each track builds up on each other and lowers the quality. Good track though, just some tips.

4/5

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Thanks guys. I wrote this pretty fast but I tried to get in some symbolism and deeper metaphors in my lyrics.

[Z!Greatest]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Lyrics are tight, couple of lines could use a bit of revising but overall I like your general approach to lyrics, there's something a lot more meaningful overlying it most of the time, it's refreshing. Flow is decent, couple of times I thought you were falling a lil bit off then you got right back on, it was solid and powerful but you seemed to lack a natural ease on the beat. Beat is decent too, hook is one of the worst I've heard in months lol, shoulda sent me a message to sing it for ya lol, not self promoting just anyone with some singing chops would have been an improvement lol.

Anyway I liked it, I like your general hustle anyway so maybe I'm bias but I thought it was a solid offering, and the other guys impressed me too, more at ease on the beat but you matched them otherwise. 3.5-4/5

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Thanks man, send me something of you singing though for future reference

[WeeZy iZ RaaaW]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Flow: 2.5
Lyrics: 1.5
overall: 2

man ur lyrics are too repetitive and ur kinda mono-tonous switch things up like. Nice beat tho but the hook needs more harmony

[morphineroberts]

Re: Sentus, Tom Chambers & D. Dubs- The Angel's Caw

Dont know why everybody is givin this a low rating, sentus. I think that you are ahead of these niggaz time. You've evolved in a poetical sense since the last time i heard you. I hope that you are able to record more avidly,Sent. If i had frequent access i would do a track with ya.
The lyrics were 4.2
The delivery was 4
the beat was 4
it would've rocked acapella