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    Lyrics:

    I go in! harder than u ever been, spit fire like I stay drinking gasoline
    My swag mean, i be killing shit up like a pissed wolverine
    Im a rapping machine, good ass music its just part of my daily routine
    Get on my level, you need 20 ladders and a big ass trampoline
    Im a monsta you better look under yo bed
    Be scared of me, shit I ont blame you go ahead
    Ima be over here chillin tryna get some bread
    After I tell ya ugly girl that I ont want head
    Stupid motherfuckin flow like my brain dead
    My rhymes so nasty i wanna throw up (asdfghjkl;')
    Holy fuck I think my mic is about to blow up
    Giant for you niggas, take some vitamins and grow up
    No im not on the top, im little bit more up cause im im im im…

    [Hook]

    And I was out for a minute, this is just a warm up
    Still strong like I done like a hundred pull ups
    Ripped another beat, fuck ill have to get it sewed up
    And no, im not with young money, but I do it big
    Hot as mofocka, bout to take over ya dig
    You cant deny the swag boy u just gotta admit
    They say music is life, and motherfucka I wanna live
    doing what I do, dressing like I do
    You cant stop staring when I walk my ass through
    Never seen fresh like this, no dejavu
    Kicking shit nigga, master in kung fu
    Niggas about to start hatin, they just motivatin
    Im on my cocky shit, im too elevated
    I don’t wanna hear devatin cause im im im im…

    [Hook]

    [Outro...]


    APPRECIATE THE FEEDBACK!
    tha studio, come back to life please :[


    #i know ppl hate the word swagg, lmao. but this beat is jus rawww..



    Last edited by Jamerson; 03-13-2011, 07:05 PM.

  • #2
    Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

    Flow: B-
    Lyrics: C

    Overall: 3/5, Maybe you need to do some ad-libs or talking like at the end of the track to the chorus to make it stand out. Also,you might need to add some ad-libs to the verses as well. Nothing too major, but it could add some needed energy to the track. Flow was on point. For the energy you put into it, I think this beat is way more 'lax than it should be. The tempo is slower than you're inflection and your delivery. Lyrics are iffy at times, but you put together a nice mid-range track.

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    • #3
      Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

      Flow - Seemed a bit scattered and it didn't fit the track really. A slower flower and with more energy would've been doper imo.
      Lyrics - Kinda weak man. No complexity to the lyrics and no stand out lines really. But I guess the lyrics fit for the track.
      Other - Agree with what Mykill said. You should added some adlibs or done other things with mastering to maybe have some parts stick out.
      Overall - 3/5.



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      • #4
        Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

        ad libs?
        thanks for the feed lol.

        damn this shit is real dead, i got more feed in shadyforum and its my 2nd post

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        • #5
          Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

          sweet beat.

          decent quality.

          not really feelin the hook, too cliche.

          flow was nice. 5/5/
          lyrics 4/5

          overall 4/5

          not really feelin the song though,
          keep it up though.
          EVERYONE CHECK MY MUSIC OUT, AND PM ME IF U HAVE ANY REQUESTS AND INQUIRIES !!!!!

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          • #6
            Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

            I wasn't really a fan of the hook or the beat. But you rode it nicely. Good flow, you pull that speedy flow off well, the were a few slips but for the most part you did wel. I felt like the lyrics couldve been a a little more advanced. I just feel like I've heard better from you man. I did like the "Giant to you niggas line...". This is a nice crossover type track though.

            3.7/5

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            • #7
              Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

              thanks for the feedback

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              • #8
                Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

                Checked out the YT video, nice flow, lyrics were good too, not really feeling the hook though.


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                • #9
                  Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

                  flow 3/5
                  lyrics 2.5/5 (reason; sometimes you were a bit hard to understand)
                  overall: 3/5

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                  • #10
                    Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

                    @YT, its not my hook but thanks for checking it out

                    Originally posted by liekwise View Post
                    flow 3/5
                    lyrics 2.5/5 (reason; sometimes you were a bit hard to understand)
                    overall: 3/5
                    lol........ the lyrics are on the first post if it was unintelligible.

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                    • #11
                      Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

                      ad libs.........?
                      & bump .

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                      • #12
                        Re: Jay Tunes - So Fresh

                        Originally posted by Jamerson View Post
                        ad libs.........?
                        & bump .
                        You don't know what adlibs are? Rofl..............



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