first stuff ive written plz rate 1-10 1 being low 10 being high

[taylorlu]

welcome to my life
the life thats meant for me
in a different state of mind
livin off da green
rollin blunts of nugget tree
this life was meant to be

no fame spittin game
truly here untamed
flow so heavy
it needs a damn crane
to lift me off this track
let the beat breath
and gain its life back

now im frostin up this block
like icing on a cup cake
tell dem girls
weezy make ur bed rock
but i can make ur earth quake

when money comes
when money goes
plant ur seeds
and let em grow

now patiently wait
while it undergoes
a change for the better
to keep u out of the weather
hip hop was washed up
so i baught sum weed to continue my flow
so listen for here it goes
i fucked this beat
and gotta baby out her
now i kill this beat
and lay it out ward
all blood is lost
no blood is found
im comin from underground
reppin uptown

i wake up every morning
to a bowl of trees and wheaties
bump that wiz and weezy
now sit back and take it easy
take some shots
and write some bars
till i become a mainstream star

[Glen F Baby]

Re: first stuff ive written plz rate 1-10 1 being low 10 being high

In order to be a good rapper you gott have a good flow, and good lyrics. Try to be clever with your lyrics, like say something like "She fucking with the shit so I call her potty mouth". Don't use that though that's pretty much an exact copy of a line I've written lol

Actually yeah I agree with the other guys it wasn't bad for a first time. And I'm liking that earthquake line.

[rebirth-of-autotune]

Re: first stuff ive written plz rate 1-10 1 being low 10 being high

weezy make ur bed rock
but i can make ur earth quake
BRAPPPPPPPPPPPPP

nICE FOR a first time bro

[YoungKd]

Re: first stuff ive written plz rate 1-10 1 being low 10 being high

Dont wanna rate with numbers but i will say not bad at all for the first time