My First Raps

[Artille]

Re: My First Raps

Alright Im gonna get to work on this song and post it tomorrow. then tell me what u think. im gonna use all of ur advice..

[MissDrizzy]

Re: My First Raps

Hello Artille. I see that you have met the dick-sucking welcoming party. Your first verse was much better than your second. I would say that you're still struggling to find a flow, as your rhymes contain many good punchlines, but lack any rhythmic pattern. For example, often in rap you have a standard length to your lines. Because of this, producing a short line often means that you follow it up with a longer one.

Additionally, and most importantly, keep in mind that the style of rap which you are doing does not lend itself well to white people. It's also played-out. The true spirit of hip-hop lives in the unexplored rhymes and themes.

If you were considering me involved
with this dick sucking welcoming party,
in my defense I didn't give advice
simply because I don't feel I'm anybody
that great to be giving advice to anyone.
Although I could have said "Keep writing"
or "Keep rapping" rather than "Keep
posting" cause I do believe you get better
with time. If you really try. So nice to know
I'm considered dick sucking for liking
someone's rap and expressing it.

But Artille, don't let being white stop or
even slow you up from rapping. Look
at Nicki Minaj. Look at Drake. Look
at Eminem. They all have a tremendous
amount of talent, and they could give
a fuck what people have to say about
their race; I'm sure of it. So say that
next time anyone at school says somethin'
to you about it.

Or wait, maybe don't cause I might have
just been dick sucking some more.

[YungMulaTheImage]

Re: My First Raps

Hello Artille. I see that you have met the dick-sucking welcoming party. Your first verse was much better than your second. I would say that you're still struggling to find a flow, as your rhymes contain many good punchlines, but lack any rhythmic pattern. For example, often in rap you have a standard length to your lines. Because of this, producing a short line often means that you follow it up with a longer one.

Additionally, and most importantly, keep in mind that the style of rap which you are doing does not lend itself well to white people. It's also played-out. The true spirit of hip-hop lives in the unexplored rhymes and themes.

If you were considering me involved
with this dick sucking welcoming party,
in my defense I didn't give advice
simply because I don't feel I'm anybody
that great to be giving advice to anyone.
Although I could have said "Keep writing"
or "Keep rapping" rather than "Keep
posting" cause I do believe you get better
with time. If you really try. So nice to know
I'm considered dick sucking for liking
someone's rap and expressing it.

But Artille, don't let being white stop or
even slow you up from rapping. Look
at Nicki Minaj. Look at Drake. Look
at Eminem. They all have a tremendous
amount of talent, and they could give
a fuck what people have to say about
their race; I'm sure of it. So say that
next time anyone at school says somethin'
to you about it.

Or wait, maybe don't cause I might have
just been dick sucking some more.

nicki minaj is part white?

[MissDrizzy]

Re: My First Raps

Hello Artille. I see that you have met the dick-sucking welcoming party. Your first verse was much better than your second. I would say that you're still struggling to find a flow, as your rhymes contain many good punchlines, but lack any rhythmic pattern. For example, often in rap you have a standard length to your lines. Because of this, producing a short line often means that you follow it up with a longer one.

Additionally, and most importantly, keep in mind that the style of rap which you are doing does not lend itself well to white people. It's also played-out. The true spirit of hip-hop lives in the unexplored rhymes and themes.

If you were considering me involved
with this dick sucking welcoming party,
in my defense I didn't give advice
simply because I don't feel I'm anybody
that great to be giving advice to anyone.
Although I could have said "Keep writing"
or "Keep rapping" rather than "Keep
posting" cause I do believe you get better
with time. If you really try. So nice to know
I'm considered dick sucking for liking
someone's rap and expressing it.

But Artille, don't let being white stop or
even slow you up from rapping. Look
at Nicki Minaj. Look at Drake. Look
at Eminem. They all have a tremendous
amount of talent, and they could give
a fuck what people have to say about
their race; I'm sure of it. So say that
next time anyone at school says somethin'
to you about it.

Or wait, maybe don't cause I might have
just been dick sucking some more.

nicki minaj is part white?

I don't know if she has white in her, I
was just getting at the fact it don't matter
what race you are cause she's like Chinese
or somethin' ain't she..?

[YungMulaTheImage]

Re: My First Raps

Hello Artille. I see that you have met the dick-sucking welcoming party. Your first verse was much better than your second. I would say that you're still struggling to find a flow, as your rhymes contain many good punchlines, but lack any rhythmic pattern. For example, often in rap you have a standard length to your lines. Because of this, producing a short line often means that you follow it up with a longer one.

Additionally, and most importantly, keep in mind that the style of rap which you are doing does not lend itself well to white people. It's also played-out. The true spirit of hip-hop lives in the unexplored rhymes and themes.

If you were considering me involved
with this dick sucking welcoming party,
in my defense I didn't give advice
simply because I don't feel I'm anybody
that great to be giving advice to anyone.
Although I could have said "Keep writing"
or "Keep rapping" rather than "Keep
posting" cause I do believe you get better
with time. If you really try. So nice to know
I'm considered dick sucking for liking
someone's rap and expressing it.

But Artille, don't let being white stop or
even slow you up from rapping. Look
at Nicki Minaj. Look at Drake. Look
at Eminem. They all have a tremendous
amount of talent, and they could give
a fuck what people have to say about
their race; I'm sure of it. So say that
next time anyone at school says somethin'
to you about it.

Or wait, maybe don't cause I might have
just been dick sucking some more.

nicki minaj is part white?

I don't know if she has white in her, I
was just getting at the fact it don't matter
what race you are cause she's like Chinese
or somethin' ain't she..?

i think...
i mean i wuz askin cuz i thought she wuz full black
shows all i know lol

[MissDrizzy]

Re: My First Raps

Hello Artille. I see that you have met the dick-sucking welcoming party. Your first verse was much better than your second. I would say that you're still struggling to find a flow, as your rhymes contain many good punchlines, but lack any rhythmic pattern. For example, often in rap you have a standard length to your lines. Because of this, producing a short line often means that you follow it up with a longer one.

Additionally, and most importantly, keep in mind that the style of rap which you are doing does not lend itself well to white people. It's also played-out. The true spirit of hip-hop lives in the unexplored rhymes and themes.

If you were considering me involved
with this dick sucking welcoming party,
in my defense I didn't give advice
simply because I don't feel I'm anybody
that great to be giving advice to anyone.
Although I could have said "Keep writing"
or "Keep rapping" rather than "Keep
posting" cause I do believe you get better
with time. If you really try. So nice to know
I'm considered dick sucking for liking
someone's rap and expressing it.

But Artille, don't let being white stop or
even slow you up from rapping. Look
at Nicki Minaj. Look at Drake. Look
at Eminem. They all have a tremendous
amount of talent, and they could give
a fuck what people have to say about
their race; I'm sure of it. So say that
next time anyone at school says somethin'
to you about it.

Or wait, maybe don't cause I might have
just been dick sucking some more.

nicki minaj is part white?

I don't know if she has white in her, I
was just getting at the fact it don't matter
what race you are cause she's like Chinese
or somethin' ain't she..?

i think...
i mean i wuz askin cuz i thought she wuz full black
shows all i know lol

Haha nah, she's got a heavy ass accent... she's
gotta be somethin.. :suprised:

[YungMulaTheImage]

Re: My First Raps

[quote=MissDrizzy]

Hello Artille. I see that you have met the dick-sucking welcoming party. Your first verse was much better than your second. I would say that you're still struggling to find a flow, as your rhymes contain many good punchlines, but lack any rhythmic pattern. For example, often in rap you have a standard length to your lines. Because of this, producing a short line often means that you follow it up with a longer one.

Additionally, and most importantly, keep in mind that the style of rap which you are doing does not lend itself well to white people. It's also played-out. The true spirit of hip-hop lives in the unexplored rhymes and themes.

If you were considering me involved
with this dick sucking welcoming party,
in my defense I didn't give advice
simply because I don't feel I'm anybody
that great to be giving advice to anyone.
Although I could have said "Keep writing"
or "Keep rapping" rather than "Keep
posting" cause I do believe you get better
with time. If you really try. So nice to know
I'm considered dick sucking for liking
someone's rap and expressing it.

But Artille, don't let being white stop or
even slow you up from rapping. Look
at Nicki Minaj. Look at Drake. Look
at Eminem. They all have a tremendous
amount of talent, and they could give
a fuck what people have to say about
their race; I'm sure of it. So say that
next time anyone at school says somethin'
to you about it.

Or wait, maybe don't cause I might have
just been dick sucking some more.

nicki minaj is part white?

I don't know if she has white in her, I
was just getting at the fact it don't matter
what race you are cause she's like Chinese
or somethin' ain't she..?

i think...
i mean i wuz askin cuz i thought she wuz full black
shows all i know lol

Haha nah, she's got a heavy ass accent... she's
gotta be somethin.. :suprised:[/quote:1os4se5e]

i agree wit tha asian thing i think she might b that...
and ye she got tha heaviest brooklynn accent i ever heard and i been there lol