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    Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

    New random track I did , my first time producing aswell and probs last track before i buy new mic lol , feedback and opinions welcome..

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    This is more than a rap, This is more of an oath
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    Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

    at first i thought you were doing a little intro of you talking before the actually song started but i then realized in was part of the song. it seems likt you were just reciting the words of reading them off paper. it sounded like you were just talking the whole time on the beat. some lines were on point but a lot were kinda off. new mic would help your quality. lyrics were alright but you need to make it sound like your rapping not just talking. Not hating on you but just pointing out on what i see so that hopefully you'll get better at this
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    • #3
      Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

      Originally posted by Young Corruption View Post
      at first i thought you were doing a little intro of you talking before the actually song started but i then realized in was part of the song. it seems likt you were just reciting the words of reading them off paper. it sounded like you were just talking the whole time on the beat. some lines were on point but a lot were kinda off. new mic would help your quality. lyrics were alright but you need to make it sound like your rapping not just talking. Not hating on you but just pointing out on what i see so that hopefully you'll get better at this
      okay thanks for the feedback, ill get to work lol my flows definately what i need to work on

      This is more than a rap, This is more of an oath

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      • #4
        Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

        the hook is pretty chill, ur lyrics are good, You need to work on ur flow though, like you should try to memorize ur lines and really practice ur flow so then it can sound liek ur actually flowing. The mic will help too u know. Also put more emotion into ur rapping bc liek i said u sound liek u were readin of a paper. Keep it up though i really like the messege you were putting out with this song, its really positive. Keep on practicing and making more music!

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        • #5
          Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

          recording quality definitely needs to be improved and the vocals seem to have a bit too much reverb; flow feels a bit rushed in some places, seems to lose tempo in a couple places. need more emotion on the mic too, more confidence in the delivery. record adlibs and doubles to help give the vocals more presence instead of just adding a bunch of reverb. tighten up the flow and it'll start sounding solid; keep at it man
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          • #6
            Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

            its not to bad, the beat is pretty cool, but seriously, you can really tell you reading this theres no emotion theres almost no delivery the lyrics seem pretty good but without a flow its not worth commenting on, this isn't hating though, just saying work on your delivery and work on your flow coz there is definalty potential there,


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            • #7
              Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

              Flow: C-
              Lyrics: Hmm...

              Overall: 2.25/5, Classic case of rushed flow syndrome. Gotta slow it down, and make sure you're going with the beat. I have been plagued by this since day one I started rhyming. One thing you could do is simplify your lines a bit. You might have too many words in each bar. Check your delivery too. Just sounds like a continuous bunch of lines. Didnt even know there was a chorus in this. Chill track though.

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              • #8
                Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

                Flow: C+
                Lyrics: B-

                Overall: 3/5. Decent song, just executed somewhat poorly. Like mykill said, you seem to rush yourself. There's no need for that. You want to go for clarity. Because of this, your flow seemed way off. The lyrics are decent as well, can be perfected with more though. I personally had trouble interpreting your accent, so I ran it back a couple of times; clarity is key. Otherwise, great effort.

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                • #9
                  Re: Dettey - Opposite Of Perfect (Prod By Dettey)

                  Hm. I was caught off guard by how the rhyming just started. It doesn't flow well at all man. I hear the rhymes but it doesnt flow, which is very important. Seems like it need a little more practice. The mic doesnt sound terrible, a few plug ins could help that. The lyrics dont sound half-bad but it would help to get them across by working on the flow on the and the mastering. The beats pretty good, you do have that going for you. I'd like to hear more from you once you work on the flow, the accent would sound nice and combo artist are aways great in my opinion.

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