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    Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

    YouTube Allstars Best Rapper Hip Hop Contest Verse

    Aren't you tired of this damn repetition,
    Rappers talking bout cash and pussy-licking,
    Life's a bitch but I don't wanna fuck it up,
    I'd rather make the most out of her and love her up

    In the timeline of rap, there's a huge gap,
    Between the old and new eras, where the heroes at?
    Now most everything on radio is phat beats,
    Fake rapping, what's happening to the rap biz

    I don't get it, it's like we all de-humanized,
    No love for good guys only rich guys,
    Guess it's OK to say that love is blind,
    And that love is deaf, cuz it can't hear the cries

    Nice deeds give low prizes, lil dinero,
    I call that "keeping it on the d-low",
    Real rappers losing green, where's Cee-lo?
    Fake rappers making green, where's American Eagle?
    Last edited by Glen F Baby; 04-06-2011, 08:00 PM.
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  • #2
    Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

    I'd say a 5. Would like to hear them laid down to a beat and maybe it would touch me better. I did like the part about love being deaf though, nice quotable verse. The only issue I have is that you basically called out every artists that's played on the radio as fake and proclaim Nas's Illmatic as the foundation of what rap was/should be.........Just MHO

    Originally posted by Glen F Baby View Post
    YouTube Allstars Best Rapper Hip Hop Contest Verse

    Don't ya get tired of this damn repetition,
    Rappers talking bout that paycheck and pussy-licking,
    I know life a bitch but I ain't tryna fuck it up,
    I'd rather make the most out of her and love her up

    When I bump Illmatic I remember the old era,
    Where rap was real and the world was clearer,
    But now everything on radio is phat beats,
    Fake rapping, what's happening to the rap biz

    I don't get it, it's like we all de-humanized,
    No love for the good guys only rich guys,
    I guess it's safe to say that love is blind,
    And that love is deaf, cuz it can't hear the cries

    Real rappers losing green, where's Cee-lo?
    Fake rappers making green, where's American Eagle?
    Nice deeds give low prizes, little dinero,
    I call that "keeping it on the d-low"
    "Be good or be good at it"

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    • #3
      Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

      Fixed it up a bit. Is it any better? Should flow a lot better now.

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      • #4
        Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

        Def much better. Get a beat and lay it down and post up kid......

        Originally posted by Glen F Baby View Post
        Fixed it up a bit. Is it any better? Should flow a lot better now.
        "Be good or be good at it"

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        • #5
          Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

          Originally posted by fla331boy View Post
          Def much better. Get a beat and lay it down and post up kid......
          I'm gonna put it to a beat soon. Well, my friend is. I'll post it on here once it's on YouTube. It's gonna go to a YouTube rap contest.

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          • #6
            Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

            not worth recording, aint nothin special about that weak 12 bar verse..
            Talk Stupid Get Ya Head Popped
            I got that Esther bitch I'm red fox
            Big B's Red Sox I get money to kill time dead clocks
            You fuckin with a nigga who don't give a fuck
            Empty the clip then roll the window up
            Pussy Niggas sweet You niggas cinnabuns
            I'm in a red bitch she say she finna cum
            Two hundred thou on a chain I don't need a piece
            That Banana Clip let Chiquita Speak
            Dark shades EazyE
            Five letter YMCMB
            Bitch Ass Nigga Pussy Ass Nigga
            I see you lookin with your lookin ass nigga


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            • #7
              Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

              Yes, flows a lot better, but still, pretty weak punchlines imo..

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              • #8
                Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

                Originally posted by ABjerg View Post
                Yes, flows a lot better, but still, pretty weak punchlines imo..
                I wrote this honestly in less than 20 minutes. Plus I was trying to stay on topic. And I didn't really care about how clever my lines were. I was just trying to be truthful and real.

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                • #9
                  Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

                  Originally posted by FuckTheFeds View Post
                  not worth recording, aint nothin special about that weak 12 bar verse..
                  Well.. it's no reason to be a jerk either. It's not like your lyrics are "worth" recording.


                  I'd say a 6.5/10 ,i like the main idea but your rhymes could get better.

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                  • #10
                    Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

                    Originally posted by Nastykid View Post
                    Well.. it's no reason to be a jerk either. It's not like your lyrics are "worth" recording.


                    I'd say a 6.5/10 ,i like the main idea but your rhymes could get better.
                    I was trying more for a "real talk" rap, so considering my decent punchlines, I think I did good. I've improved ever since this though but I kinda don't feel like going on here anymore. Seems like you either don't get any replies at all, or people get butt-hurt when you diss them once *cough* fuckthefeds *cough*. It's really sad how people can't receive constructive criticism and try to improve from that. Oh well...guess not everyone can do that. I'd like to believe that I've done this in the past couple weeks, and I believe I have. I ain't fake like most of you guys on here are, and I still got good punchlines and a pretty good and unique flow. So have fun haters...and to everyone who hasn't been negative to me...I HOPE YOU GET A RECORD DEAL AND SUCCEED IN LIFE!

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                    • #11
                      Re: Please Rate My Lyrics From 1-10

                      yo glen, what up dude

                      i like your ideas and concepts, i just think you should work on making the bars slightly longer and slicker wording. That is all!!!

                      otherwise decent punchlines but within those punchlines try to add in some word play to be wittier.

                      youre not getting comments because there is a format with which you're supposed to post.... i think you gotta put up a few links of comments that you have made on other posts. only then do people respond, thats kinda lame but w.e

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