Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

[Z!Greatest]

Alryt everyone, it's your boy Ziggy Blockley back with another track, this time sombre reflective cut Better Days. As usual I handle hook duties plus provide the 1st and 3rd verses, with my homie $unnyy helping out on the 2nd.

As usual, aswell as my feedback provided below, if anyone wants feedback on a track any other time that I've missed, holla in this thread or whatever.

Here's the track- YouTube - Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Produced by Showdown of Rockitpro)

And my feedback- http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...arty-beat.html

http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...d-by-none.html

[pgathriller]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

vocals sounds a little dry and it sounds like there's not doubling or adlibs which would help give it a nice presence and help with the melancholic vibe of the track. hook rhytm is dope but it needs some harmonies. dude in the 2nd verse has some nice doubling, try doing more stuff like that for your verses. autotune effects is good, could be better but i like how it's not overly used. keep at it and this could be a nice dark track

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

yeah i agree adlibs would help bring out the presence. .

i love the topic though, reminiscing type topic, it made me think back lol.

like pg said, hook harmonies would improve the chorus as well.

4/5, but like this. though. keep it up.

[Z!Greatest]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

Cheers for the feed lads, I agree perhaps it needed a few ad libs on the verse, but the hook IS multi tracked, there's 2 non autotuned vocal tracks then that autotune track for just "silver" and "gold" in the background plus overdubbed on the "oh oh oh oh" on the end. I've learnt not to do fully dry hooks so it ain't a dry hook, verses are completely dry though lol.

[Dukez]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

very nice ziggy!!! I dig it, I don't really like ya boy on the second verse. Something about the mastering or his delivery or both..just doesnt sound professional enough.

but you were really nice. my only advice would be to slow up what you say....and by that I dont mean dumbing down but come with more swag and leave room for adlibs

but I have to say you did ride the beat with nice lyrics.

4/5

[mykill]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

Flow: A-
Lyrics: B+

Overall: 4.25/5, You got a decent sound. Very unique. As always your singing is on point. You got that autotune on lock. Got a few dips on your flow while doing the first verse. I like the speed of your delivery though. Sunny is questionable, only because his delivery is kinda weak. This track is mastered pretty well. Good vide. Good mood. Z! when you droppin a tape?

[JSmooth]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

flow- 4/5
lyrics- 4.5/5
overall- 4/5
yo this is a nice track. with a melancholic beat like this you really have to be careful with the flow so as not to make it too melancholic, but u did a really good job. Lyrics were deep and stayed consistent through both of ur verses. Hook was really good as well (nice autotune). The others have already mentioned it but possibly adlibbing some and commanding more of a powerful presence on the mic will help to counter the slow vibed beat.

[Pestrator]

Re: Z!Greatest feat. $unnyy - Better Days (Mellow Retrospective Storytelling Track)

damn this is raw bro. Your lyrics were good I like how they were telling a story. I agree with the adlib thing though. Hook is really nice and solid u know how to work real well with the autotune. Overall good song bro keep it up 4/5