please rate 1-10 guys!! punchlines..

[Acattt]

you got baby beats like a growing heart. copy me? shit you cloning art ha i pop a couple off now im a shooting star.

Surfing the pussy like Kelly slater. Have my niggas join in, multiplayer.

We lookin eye to eye like she tryna tell me shit she in the FBI the way she give intelligence

so high like overblew the dank haha new account, shit overdrew the bankkk

Strange boy, that's the fate of mine. Traveling thoughts different state of mind

These niggas just ain't heavy so say they moving light me and my boys, 100 clips it's movie nighttt aha

You guys think you scary well I'm the horror scene shoot you in the Hardrive and delete ya fuckin memory

I'm that all day niggas but only sometime My ryhmes knock you out now that's the punchline

Up in this bitch mr run in the room I stand in the spotlight man on the moon haa




haha just some lines im about to do something with. let me know if they are worthy, thanks

[SetGeckoO]

Re: please rate 1-10 guys!! punchlines..

you got baby beats like a growing heart. copy me? shit you cloning art ha i pop a couple off now im a shooting star.

Surfing the pussy like Kelly slater. Have my niggas join in, multiplayer.

We lookin eye to eye like she tryna tell me shit she in the FBI the way she give intelligence

so high like overblew the dank haha new account, shit overdrew the bankkk

Strange boy, that's the fate of mine. Traveling thoughts different state of mind

These niggas just ain't heavy so say they moving light me and my boys, 100 clips it's movie nighttt aha

You guys think you scary well I'm the horror scene shoot you in the Hardrive and delete ya fuckin memory

I'm that all day niggas but only sometime My ryhmes knock you out now that's the punchline

Up in this bitch mr run in the room I stand in the spotlight man on the moon haa




haha just some lines im about to do something with. let me know if they are worthy, thanks

eh sounds like something wiz would spit but try to make your lines more clever because your flow should sound without pauses to explain lines

[Glen F Baby]

Re: please rate 1-10 guys!! punchlines..

Wow I liked a good number of these lines, nice. I like your style. I wanna see how this sounds recorded with a beat! Make magic happen man!

I liked:
"me and my boys, 100 clips it's movie night"
"Have my niggas join in, multiplayer"


"My ryhmes knock you out now that's the punchline" - Eh...IMO this could've been a lot more impressive if you were able to deliver it correctly. Great idea, but it just didn't have the wow factor, ya know? Like nice idea, but you didn't say it in a way that impresses me.

"she in the FBI the way she give intelligence" - Well this sounds like she's actually IN the FBI, lol. Maybe just say "She gives intelligence like an FBI agent"

[Acattt]

Re: please rate 1-10 guys!! punchlines..

Haha ya I feel you. Good advice! Ya I'm putting something together so I'll post it on here. Anyways thanks for the tips!