Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

[MissDrizzy]

Sat down, started writing, didn't
stop till I had these 32 bars

(The "I get crazy" beat was going
through my head, especially
towards the end.)


So this is my freestyle; just writtin' no stoppin'
Wish you had my lifestyle, I stay bottle poppin'
Stay with my codiene, but it ain't cause I'm coughin'
And if you fuck with me, I'll leave you in a coffin
Six feet under, leave you with the maggots
You suck at rap like it's a dick, pussy fagot
You have no skill, nor flow... why are you braggin'?
I am hottest new female, you are plastic baggin'
I will get closer to the top, while you stay slaggin'
Damn, I meant slackin', eyes heavy but there's no time for nappin'
They "boo" you off stage, but for me, they are clappin'
No "Applause" sign needed, cause it's a natural happen....
-ing... the syrup got me slow with my words
But still higher... still flyer than a flock of birds
The way I can go non-stop is just absurds
Yes, that's a plural, I said it beitchhh
You mad cause you couldn't get away with this sheittt
I'm so shower fresh, but you... you smellin' like piss
Go ahead... try an' take a hit at me; you gone miss
Damn when will I stop? I can't slow up with the diss... es
I'm so clean, but my money dirty like the dish-es
I'm the next Baddest Bitch, so excuse me Miss-es
I eat rappers too Wayne, who's for break-fass? (breakfast)
Shitty ass rappers on my plate... man I'm pick-y
I just wish I could collab. with Miss Nick-i
Track would be so nasty, that it'd be stick-y
There's no one on my level, so who's against me?
Cause I don't ever stop, I only pause, see...
My flow just parts like the Red Sea
This right here, this was part three*
Part 4 comin soon from Yours Trul-y
I'm pausin' for now, so until then, miss me.

*As in the 3rd thing I've posted here.

What do you think, honestly?
Any tips? Specific things you liked?
Trying to improve.. any feedback
would be helpful




Now I'm goin' to bed cause I'm mad tired.
Night HQ

[YungMulaTheImage]

Re: Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

Damn when will I stop? I can't slow up with the diss... es
I'm so clean, but my money dirty like the dish-es

i really like that part, and tha whole rap wuz really good
i really like when i see a girl who can rap real good

cuz im not trying 2 be sexist or anything, but you dont really see really good girl rappers out, ya know? cept 4 nicki...

[JrockHQ]

Re: Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

Damn when i was reading it i thought a dude wrote it

Props i dont see many girls that can rhyme like this

[MissDrizzy]

Re: Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

Damn when i was reading it i thought a dude wrote it

Man, you're like the 10th person to say that to me lol.
What exactly does that mean? Is it a good or bad thing?
Sorry if I sound retarded but I really don't know..

Props i dont see many girls that can rhyme like this

Damn when will I stop? I can't slow up with the diss... es
I'm so clean, but my money dirty like the dish-es

i really like that part, and tha whole rap wuz really good
i really like when i see a girl who can rap real good

cuz im not trying 2 be sexist or anything, but you dont really see really good girl rappers out, ya know? cept 4 nicki...

Thank you, thank you, thank you

[CashMoneyMillionaire]

Re: Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

dats ill stuff keep ip the good work

[EmCee]

Re: Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

Freestyle = Off the top of the head saying it out loud.

Keystyle = Written down off the top of the head.

I could write the craziest rap, with good vocab, and good multies with good flow and call it a freestyle. You don't know how long I'd take to write it. So lets call it a keystyle.

[koolkiddale13]

Re: Freestyle. (Trying to improve...)

Damn..Omg.
Youh is very sick.

Youh bettah than me!
And bettah than some niggas on this site.
Keep up the GREAT work.