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  • Please rate 1-10! Phil - Sweetest Girl Pt. II

    This is a passion project of mine, i've been wanting to this for a couple of years.

    This is still a working project, and i'm probably going to change a lot, and add more verses and possible a hook.

    Written on Wyclefs "Sweetest Girl" instrumental.

    rough cut 1st verse:
    i remember the first time that i met her,
    man, how could i possible forget her
    i remember the first time she got the attention of my blue,
    one look, she made me forget every single bad thing that i've been through,
    it's true,
    what they say,
    that every bad thing turns good one day,
    it's was cold and it was raining,
    i consider that a good day,
    cause that was the day that i met her,
    and suddenly, all the stuff in my past didn't matter,
    everything was getting badder,
    but she put that in my rearview and made everything better
    it's far behind me now,
    to be honest, i don't remember how i've got there,
    she made it clear to me and she gave me reasons,
    she gave me hope, so that i never have to go back there,
    but now she's gone, and i never even got a chance to thank her,
    but those words will the very last ones, in my final chapter

    rough cut verse 2:

    i wonder if she remember that night in december?
    we stayed up talkin until we knew exactly everything about each other,
    i could ask her a question but i already knew the answer,
    i hope she doesn't remember that time i messed up, thank god for second chances,
    she said that life ain't nothing but a ballroom, and we're just dancers,
    we all lookin for someone to dance with,
    we all lookin,
    why did she leave?
    everything felt so right,
    at that very moment, i really loved my life,
    i've looked back at that day so many times, thinkin what if, i just might,
    forget it, cause that night,
    easily makes top ten of the best days out of my life,
    even though it didn't end right,
    i still consider her a big part, of my life
    cause she gave it a meaning,
    how did she do that, it was easy,
    all that she did, was to believe me
    she made me feel like there's actually something, that can stop me from leaving

    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/t26047/
    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/t23086/
    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/t22226/
    Last edited by UnknownP; 04-27-2011, 06:32 PM.

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    Re: Please rate 1-10! Phil - Sweetest Girl Pt. II

    what up homie

    I'd like to see more before I can make up my mind but here's a little advice

    Is the song about a certain person? If so : write about CERTAIN SITUATIONS....when a listener hears a story they relate and enjoy it more.

    If it isn't about someone, the concept is still about a girl, so think back and try to FUSE different events together to create something

    IT DOESNT HAVE TO BE STORYTELLING... you can write punchline rap with wit and inject a little story

    I really do like:
    it's true,
    what they say,
    that every bad thing turns good one day
    AND
    but now she's gone, and i never even got a chance to thank her,
    but those words will the very last ones, in my final chapter

    those parts just rolls off the tongue real nice, but keep at it man...

    Check my new lyrics i posted, (LEAVING YOU) they are about a girl too.

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    • #3
      Re: Please rate 1-10! Phil - Sweetest Girl Pt. II

      Originally posted by Dukez View Post
      what up homie

      I'd like to see more before I can make up my mind but here's a little advice

      Is the song about a certain person? If so : write about CERTAIN SITUATIONS....when a listener hears a story they relate and enjoy it more.

      If it isn't about someone, the concept is still about a girl, so think back and try to FUSE different events together to create something

      IT DOESNT HAVE TO BE STORYTELLING... you can write punchline rap with wit and inject a little story

      I really do like:
      it's true,
      what they say,
      that every bad thing turns good one day
      AND
      but now she's gone, and i never even got a chance to thank her,
      but those words will the very last ones, in my final chapter

      those parts just rolls off the tongue real nice, but keep at it man...

      Check my new lyrics i posted, (LEAVING YOU) they are about a girl too.
      i wrote a version of this all about one special one, but that one got too personal and i only showed it to her.
      this one is inspired by the same girl, but it's not about her.

      verse two is a little more personal, inspired by true events, so you might like that one more! i'll post it as soon as i'm satiesfied with the first draft!

      and as usual, i'mma check your shit out too!

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      • #4
        Re: Please rate 1-10! Phil - Sweetest Girl Pt. II

        Probably one of the best lyrics around here,good work. 8/10

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