22 Bar Rap! It's really raw, check it out!

[Lord of Kaos]

Before you read, lemme give ya a little background info: I rap under the moniker Apollo, who in Greek Mythology was the God of Music, medicine, prophecy, etc. He was basically God of a lot of shit to put it simple. Keeping in line with that, I made a reference to that a few times in the verse. It was originally made to go along the D.o.A. beat by Jay Z when I wrote it a few days ago but now, I'm thinking of something perhaps a bit more original. Here's the instrumental though so you can see how it sounds over the beat:

YouTube - Jay Z - D.O.A (Instrumental)

Unh, God of Medicine, my flow so sick
Nigga watch ya step cause da flow filled with spit
cuz im spittin des rhymes on time and dey startin to drip
And I'm dripping and dropping lyrical bombs on you bitch
Now lemme switch the flow up, you can call me an architect
I'm versatile, like wearing Nike Jeans with a Polo Vest
Yung Apollo on da track, lemme do what I do best
And let ya girl give me brain like she studying for a test
Boyz n da hood go hard just like Eazy
we shoot dat Deuce deuce and I aint talking Chris Breezy
Bout to school you boys, get ready for my teachings
I'm da fucking God of Music, do you boys wanna want my preachings?
On a money grind like we want Tony Hawks to pay us
Having Anger Towards Everyone Reaching Success, yeah HATERS
but keep hating and shit gets hectic and I have to call Kaos
And he leaves dem .45 presents, no need to even thank us
Wayne type flow, Kanye Sized Ego
Rap session in my room, call it showtime at the Apollo
Sippin on da syrup, you can call dis beat my 'Eggo
Cuz I just drowned it with my flow and I'm gone let it go on dat note


So any comments would be well appreciated, even if it's to tell me to kill myself for trying to rap. I'll remember it when I try to better my skills. ^.^

[Dukez]

Re: 22 Bar Rap! It's really raw, check it out!

is cooool....couple of nice lines there

i like the idea behind the hater acronym but it doesnt sound slick really...so keep wokrin on that line

I'm versatile, like wearing Nike Jeans with a Polo Vest -- i like this one.

last two lines are pretty decent enders.

3/5

check my shit on the Duke - Leaving You and leave some comments.