J-Smooth- My Dreams

[JSmooth]

This is one of the songs off of my first mixtape, First Steps, which i put out not long ago. It features one of my boys on the second verse. PLEASE LEAVE SOME FEEDBACK.

LimeLinx - Preview - My Dreams(ft. Tragedy).mp3


http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post464358
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post464352

[Gibbsy]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

Gmg sick producer, the beat is killer, the flow on this one is on fire too deffo feeling this track man!!
delivery is some chill shizzz but definalty works on this lyrically tight to man your definalty a good artist looking forward to hearing more of your work man overall 4.5/5 !!

[SachmoJones]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

The intro and first verse are perfect. I love the honesty in the vocals mixed with the wordplay. I really like this beat as well. Overall I think its a perfect song to release as your first song off a first mixtape. As far a critical feedback is concerned, I would have loved harder hitting bass. Make that sh^ pound man, it would make this beat great and the parts where the beat drops out and comes back in that much better.

[JSmooth]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

The intro and first verse are perfect. I love the honesty in the vocals mixed with the wordplay. I really like this beat as well. Overall I think its a perfect song to release as your first song off a first mixtape. As far a critical feedback is concerned, I would have loved harder hitting bass. Make that sh^ pound man, it would make this beat great and the parts where the beat drops out and comes back in that much better.

Preciate it bruh. I don't produce my own beats, but i'll let my boy know what u said.

"Gmg sick producer, the beat is killer, the flow on this one is on fire too deffo feeling this track man!!
delivery is some chill shizzz but definalty works on this lyrically tight to man your definalty a good artist looking forward to hearing more of your work man overall 4.5/5 !!"

Thanks a lot bro. I'll post some more stuff soon

[Z!Greatest]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

A big fan of these sorta tracks, and in short- you killed it. You see people saying that for average tracks a lot on here, but your flow was on point 100%, lyrically is what I expected, but above the cliche I've come to expect from the subject. Seemed a bit "comfortable" at times, but you switched it up good. Autotune bit at the end sounded sick, reminds me of when Drizzy uses it for like 2 bars of a 16, stands out more and sounds sick.

Beat isn't the usual, almost got a Lobster & Champagne over dinner vibe, but has a slight edge to it that fits it to the subject better. Good selection.

Hook isn't brilliant, singing is fine and everything but it just drags a bit instead of propelling the song to the next verse. It's passable but definite the weakest aspect of the track.

Tragedy on the second verse is good, the "toilet/ass" punchlines stopped being clever in '08 though lol. However, he's definetely more solid than the people I've featured on some of my tracks so no hate, a solid and good inclusion, props to your boy.

Overall, minus the hook it's an enjoyable track, could see it on a Drizzy mixtape or something, enjoyable, repeatable but not quite killer enough to be album worthy.

For a newcomer though you've come in real hard, already cemented yourself as a top tier candidate on here, and for that you got my respect.

4/5 and looking forward to hearing more from you. Which I will in a second since I'm gonna check your other shit lol.

[Pestrator]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

damn this is raw bro i really like the tiny bit of auto tune on the end of ur verse n i dig the hook too. Your verse was solid and ur flow was perfectly on point. Keep it up bro 4/5

[MC_Crary]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

Another good track from you man. I like the concept, especially with it being on your first tape. I see what Z means when he likens it to something drake wold do. Your flow is perfect. The lyrics were pretty good, your biggest draw is your wordplay. The way you say things seperates you from some of the others here, if that makes sense. Followed the concept, but didnt have anythng that stood out to me. The singing is terrible, which is a good thing. When you can atleast hold a tune, it helps with diversifing your music.

[JSmooth]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

Another good track from you man. I like the concept, especially with it being on your first tape. I see what Z means when he likens it to something drake wold do. Your flow is perfect. The lyrics were pretty good, your biggest draw is your wordplay. The way you say things seperates you from some of the others here, if that makes sense. Followed the concept, but didnt have anythng that stood out to me. The singing is terrible, which is a good thing. When you can atleast hold a tune, it helps with diversifing your music.

Thanks for the feedback. what do you mean when you say "the singing is terrible, which is a good thing?"

SN: I appreciate the rest of the feedback, i def read it all. "SUMMER SCHOOL'N" MAY 6!!!

[MC_Crary]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

Lol, Ive done that a couple of times lately. I meant to say isnt terrible.

[JSmooth]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

haha ok. u had me confused for a minute

[Sentus]

Re: J-Smooth- My Dreams

This is pretty sick man. Your flow and delivery is great. You deffinitely have that persona that makes you stand out. Your lyrics were alright, good enough to get by but not good enough to stand out if you know what I mean? Try and throw in some multis for starters and then go from there. You deffinitely have a great sound though.