Sentus- Darkest Outlook

[Sentus]

This is the best shit I've put out by far. Definitely check it out

The lyrics to my verse:

(Sentus)
When i hit the stage you know I gotta fire all
But fuck a clip. . . cause I spit . . . naga fireballs
The most vile claws rip through flesh
Rupturing your brain as all of your tissues left
Scattered around you; all the haters will deny
But I burn with the same blaze as Eta Carinae
When I'm ridin on beats, I strive in the heat
I form a lyrical calamity derived from the beast
I arrive on a fleet from a distant galaxy
And gain trust by showing instant alchemy
Take my final form as a vicious Valkyrie
And then have the human resistance out for me
You stand no chance when I conjure my tones
The worst monster to roam conquered the throne
Relax and just bear with us, rap is just scared of us
So let me entertain you like Maximus Meridius

The download link is in here if you want it
YouTube - ‪Chambers, Sentus & SaJJad- The Darkest Outlook (Produced By Anno Domini Beats)‬‏

http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post496130
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...by-youngo.html

[Artille]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

The song as a whole is pretty nice. Nice hook, smooth beat, nice features. But let's focus more so on you than them:

Flow: It stayed on point throughout the whole verse. Very nice.
Lyrics: Lyrics were pretty killer and nice. Some ill multies and complex lyrics.
Other: Your voice and the way you approached the track made it not as enjoyable unfortunately, but still pretty good.
Overall: 3.5/5

[MC_Crary]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

As far as detail in you bars, you definitely take the cake man. I'm not even gonna try to act like I caught every references. The intricacy of your multis s great too. Didn't focus to hard on the others but you clearly out shined them. I liked your flow on this too, the beat fit. Though t still is changing much, you continue to choose beats that fit t. Your quality has greatly improved. Looking forward to some solo music by you, and some pyromaniacs stuff.

[pgathriller]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

@First guy - Vocals sound a bit too loud in comparison to the beat. I like the subtle doubling he has at the end of his lines, could use a nice subtle delay or some adlibs to fill out the vocal presence a bit more.

@Second guy (you) - Diggin your delivery a lot more than the first guy's, you have a nice aggressiveness in your delivery and emotion that makes your verse sound much more interesting and listenable. Sounds like you don't have any doubling or anything which might add to your vocal presence and give you an even stronger flow.

@Third guy - Has a nice delivery but it sounds like he has an english accent that gives his voice a tonality that I can't vibe with, completely subjective but for me, it's just a tone that I can't really dig


Overall, I'd say you took that song by far; had the best quality verse recording wise, delivery wise, lyrically, etc. Only critic really is play around with doubling, delays, and ad libs - - just keep them really subtle, almost unnoticeable but it'll give your verses that extra oomph to put you above the rest even more so! keep at it man!

[Z!Greatest]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

First guy was aight, way too casual for his lyrics though, and that last metaphor was borderline. Hook is average, I don't like hooks by people who can't sing lol, guy was flat as shit.

Second guy (you)- Well better than the 1st guy, couple of times you sounded a tiny bit out of breath, but enjoyed the delivery, flow and lyrics. Top form

3rd guy- Yelawolf sounding voice lol, cliche ridden verse. Good flow, meh lyrics.

Overall 3.5/5, mixed bag, your contribution being the highlight. Beat does the job but too plodding for me.

Was a good listen

[Coleon]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

12.5/12.5
Good lyrics and stuff

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

Thanks for all the feed guys :b:

@pgathriller, I'll start experimenting with adlibs, thanks for the advice

[mrr3ye5]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

Flow: 3/5 it was different, your flowing made it kinda hard to understand what you were saying
Lyrics: 4.5/5 Lyrics were dope tho, you got mad wordplay dude
Consistency: 4/5 You were with the track most of the time, rarely did you fall
Other: Mixing isn't that good, but your verse was nice
: C

[Redd Herring]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

Flow: Is really good they were delivered perfectly for this beat
Lyrics: Some of the reallest shit I've heard in a while
Other Notes: nothin else to say really you guys killed this joint haha
Overall/Rating: 4/5

[Sentus]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

Thanks for checkin it out guys

[mykill]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

Flow: B-
Lyrics: B+

Overall: 3/5, I dont think this is the best 16 you've dropped. I mean your great lyrical precision is there, but the delivery and flow are still the same caliber of other songs you've put out. Don't take it as me knocking you, but this is lacking compared to some of your previous efforts. I'm not saying its not good, because you are pretty consistent and pretty pinpoint focused when it comes to rhymes, but for some reason I'm still not feeling the delivery or hearing a flawless flow. One could even make a lyrical argument from the line "Take my final form as a vicious Valkyrie" inquiring if you're calling yourself a female, because a majority of Valkyries if not all in Norse mythology were female. But that's nit-picking, so we'll cast that aside. Again, it was a solid effort, but not I dont get the "best yet" affliation you put to it.

[SkJayDubb]

Re: Sentus- Darkest Outlook

This is ok to me... I give it a 3.5/5

It seems like you need to "mold" your lyrics around the beat if you get what i'm saying? Some stuff sounds rushed.