Artille - The Prince's Son

[Artille]

Here's a new solo track entitled "The Prince's Son" produced by Zane Beats. I was going for more emotion on this one as well as better mastering techniques. I feel this is my best song yet, still need to improve however. Check it out, leave feedback, enjoy. Thank you.

Feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...cup-remix.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post570467

[mykill]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

Flow: B-
Lyrics: A++

Overall: 3.75/5, Unique beat choice. There are some very personal and emotional lyrics in this one. I think you're starting to get the hang of the recording thing and coming out into your own as an artist. Fix that delivery thing and you'll be good. I think the thing with the delivery that makes it so important is that sometimes everything will just roll out and be like a run on sentence. The liveliness and variability in the delievery makes it interesting and keeps the listener's attention. In a few tracks we've done, the makings are there. You just need to practice more mic work and step it up. Good wordplay in this one too.Good work.

[YoungTune.]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

Not feeling this at all tbh....it feels like a failed attempt at an emotinal song.



#plzdontbanme

[wayniac number1]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

Not feeling this at all tbh....it feels like a failed attempt at an emotinal song.



#plzdontbanme

lmao

[Artille]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

Flow: B-
Lyrics: A++

Overall: 3.75/5, Unique beat choice. There are some very personal and emotional lyrics in this one. I think you're starting to get the hang of the recording thing and coming out into your own as an artist. Fix that delivery thing and you'll be good. I think the thing with the delivery that makes it so important is that sometimes everything will just roll out and be like a run on sentence. The liveliness and variability in the delievery makes it interesting and keeps the listener's attention. In a few tracks we've done, the makings are there. You just need to practice more mic work and step it up. Good wordplay in this one too.Good work.

Thanks man, definitely need to work on my presence on the mic. Gonna try to adjust some of the effects I use as well. Do you have any recommendations for VSTs?

Not feeling this at all tbh....it feels like a failed attempt at an emotinal song.


#plzdontbanme

Sorry you didn't like it, but thanks for the listen.

[Coleon]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

...I honestly think this is your worst song. The others may have had faults with delivery but here you shot for the stars and fell short. The mixing was better, maybe tone down the reverb a bit. I felt the main fault here is that emotional songs rely on...well..emotion and your delivery isn't developed enough to get that across like your lyrics do. Maybe if the emotion was being distant lifeless. Keep it up though Arty, you're moving in the right direction.

EDIT: Reread this and noticed how harsh it comes off. Feedback like this drives people so I won't revise it, I'd just like to say the song was by no means bad. I just feel like dwelling on the good points of a song are really pointless in feedback.

[MC_Crary]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

I don't think the flow was lacking like everyone else says. Though it could've been better I still think you conveyed the feeling correctly. It wasn't like a sad emotional song, just more of a laid back track. Your lyrics are always good, sometimes I felt like you were starting to spit, but then you'd take it back to a more relaxed style. There's some static in the vocals, maybe a little noise reduction could help with that. Also, your vocals seemed flatter than usual. Good track though man, I see your continuing improvement.

[Artille]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

Thanks for the feedback. And coleon i enjoy criticism, helps me improve.

[Franknstein]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

Song got swag, but your flow fell off at times. Your lyrics were good but I dunno I felt that you didn't mean what you were saying (not sure if anyone else felt it).
Personally I liked the beat and overall song.

[mrr3ye5]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

FLOW:C :was alright, i think you need to add MORE feeling to it, but i can hear what your trying to do, deliver more emotionally man
LYRICS:B :Good dude, i feel'em

Overall: Dope track!.. feelin it ,good chill song

[ProBitaz.]

Re: Artille - The Prince's Son

I already left feedback on Google+, as I said, shit's hella dope imo!