Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

[Young Corruption]

This is a Exclusive to LWHQ from my new mixtape. the first exclusive was for Facebook and Google+ friends only. Now that i'm not all dope'd up every waking second i'll be dropping more feedback

LimeLinx - Preview - The Rapture(I'm back).mp3

Lyrics:
you ain't never heard this shit coming out your speaker
got a bullet ready, call it a heat seeker
yeah she coming harder, you ain't never seen her
got the bitch yelling, i ain't even read her
12 bullets in the clip, are you a bleeder?
now i took you out, how you gonna treat her?
digging your grave, your messing with a killer
spitting these rhymes, i ain't never been realer
dropped out of college, going into rap
making her scream, while tilting my hat
this is the new rapture, you know i'm coming back
mess with fake rapper, and you'll get the clap
money shrinking faster then coming in
thats the price i pay for doing this sin
dropping music for free is how i'm gonna win
slippin on cups filled with juice and gin
getting my lean on with a couple of friends
getting my smoke on in my new benz
red eyes darker than the devil himself
got the bitch crying all over himself
hell is where i am at and i'm taking over
the warm up is here sucicied takeover
had a lot of people who wanted to doubt me
now i'm getting good, who wants to out me?

yeah i'm a player i play these hoes
turn them to whatever like play-doe
see them on the street better holla hello
once they get the money it comes to me yo
i get free lines like i'm charlie sheen
i get more lines that make you eyes bleed
beer in hand makes the problem go away
ciggerrtee in mouth where is my asstray
not a good influence cause i sell that yay
theres a missing body its probably in the bay
i'm a rapper i'm a dog i murder these beats
and i don't charge a thing to be on a new feat
i'm getting better hello retreat
girls sucking dick cause they know they defeat
smoking on that weed where is that spiff
doing my coke it gives me a good lift
living life to the fullest i never sleep
killing fake bitches never get any grief
you've been warm never start any beef
i'll cut you up like i'm the top chief
just getting started you know i bring the heat
warm up's here i'm riding this beat
fuck what haters say i know i'm the best
swagga so nice in never gets rest




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[mykill]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

Flow: C
Lyrics: B-

Overall: 3/5, I see you've improved a bit. You can hear your "plosives" on the verse, so you might either need to back up a little bit or get a pop filter for when you record. Delivery is kinda bleh on this one. The effort is there, but the feeling is kind of robotic. Like I said before, I can tell how you've improved since the last time you posted a song, so kudos on getting better. Lyrically this song is missing something for being called "the Rapture". The intended vibe comes off, but the lyrics are nothing I would think of for a song of this type. I would expect more multis, better wordplay, and some seriously devastating punches. Nice concept, good effort, decent master, all in all this song is ok. Thanks for coming back Young!

[Tha Professor]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

lol did u really drop college to rap?

[lilchukieforeheadbig]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

lol did u really drop college to rap?

[ATLien666]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

First, this:

lol did u really drop college to rap?

Secondly: Flow: was really robotic sounding, there was no emotion or tone. 2.5/5.
Lyrics - Ehh, they were above basic. There wasn't any amazing metaphors or lyrics or anything. 3.5/5
Overall - 3.5/5

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

Son tell me u didnt really drop out of school to rap.
In todays times aint nobody gonna make it to drake status no more, its wayyy to saturated. Everyone and their mom is a rapper lol
STAY IN SCHOOL!!!!!

[Young Corruption]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

Flow: C
Lyrics: B-

Overall: 3/5, I see you've improved a bit. You can hear your "plosives" on the verse, so you might either need to back up a little bit or get a pop filter for when you record. Delivery is kinda bleh on this one. The effort is there, but the feeling is kind of robotic. Like I said before, I can tell how you've improved since the last time you posted a song, so kudos on getting better. Lyrically this song is missing something for being called "the Rapture". The intended vibe comes off, but the lyrics are nothing I would think of for a song of this type. I would expect more multis, better wordplay, and some seriously devastating punches. Nice concept, good effort, decent master, all in all this song is ok. Thanks for coming back Young!

yeah i had one pop filter on the mic but didn't sent up my other one cause i just got a new mic and was trying out the grain feature on it which is pretty cool which i hope ya'll could hear the better quality. thanks for the feedback and i'll try to work on punchlines lol its harder for me to do punchlines cause i always rap real shit but i wanna switch it up. And glad to be back i'll be dropping in every once in a while with a song but giving more feedback for sure

First, this:



Secondly: Flow: was really robotic sounding, there was no emotion or tone. 2.5/5.
Lyrics - Ehh, they were above basic. There wasn't any amazing metaphors or lyrics or anything. 3.5/5
Overall - 3.5/5

To you and everyone else i DID NOT drop out to rap but i DID get KICKED out of college so while working full-time rap is more of my back up lol thought i'd might add i got kicked out for failing grades after having lower than a 2.0 gpa for 2 straight years so academic suspension is what i'm on... was always to high to go to class and then if i did i was too high and failed every test and i just flat out didn't give a shit cause of the coke, weed, pills and more shit that i was on

robotic? really? :/ i was told i sound more aggressive on the mic and one girl told me she had it on repeat but i'll work on more emotion and metaphors/ thanks for the feedback

[ATLien666]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

yeah i had one pop filter on the mic but didn't sent up my other one cause i just got a new mic and was trying out the grain feature on it which is pretty cool which i hope ya'll could hear the better quality. thanks for the feedback and i'll try to work on punchlines lol its harder for me to do punchlines cause i always rap real shit but i wanna switch it up. And glad to be back i'll be dropping in every once in a while with a song but giving more feedback for sure

damn, bro, that's really fucked up. You needa straighten up. Don't let a good opportunity like college pass you by.


To you and everyone else i DID NOT drop out to rap but i DID get KICKED out of college so while working full-time rap is more of my back up lol thought i'd might add i got kicked out for failing grades after having lower than a 2.0 gpa for 2 straight years so academic suspension is what i'm on... was always to high to go to class and then if i did i was too high and failed every test and i just flat out didn't give a shit cause of the coke, weed, pills and more shit that i was on

robotic? really? :/ i was told i sound more aggressive on the mic and one girl told me she had it on repeat but i'll work on more emotion and metaphors/ thanks for the feedback

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

i DID get KICKED out of college so while working full-time rap is more of my back up lol thought i'd might add i got kicked out for failing grades after having lower than a 2.0 gpa for 2 straight years so academic suspension is what i'm on... was always to high to go to class and then if i did i was too high and failed every test and i just flat out didn't give a shit cause of the coke, weed, pills and more shit that i was on

rap about that then .

the drugs, gettin kicked out , and not givin a fuck, instead of saying u dropped out to rap.
why would u have written that line if it wasnt true though???

cause i always rap real shit

^^^^^^^^^^^^

deep down inside, u probably really didnt try in school, and dropped out, becuz u really wanna to rap.

[xXPyroXx]

Re: Young Corruption: The Rapture(I'm back)

when i first herd ur voice i was like cool its kinda a childish gambino thing
but like 6 bars in i was bored by your mono toned monotonous voice, express yourself dont just read it
like im not reading all your comments
but i hope somebody else told u this im seriously not hating but
try switching up your flow its 1 2, 1 2, ALL THE WAY TROUGH,
now i cant fault ya cause u did go 1 1 at one stage but like come on
i hope i helped but i know being frank isnt always recieved well so it's cool if u tell me to fuck myself