Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Hey this is my first remix ive done. voice is a lil weird cuz my garageband has bad quality but please give me feedback!
http://hulkshare.com/oufnii4lns5u

Feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...-hop-beat.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...cci-verse.html

edit: added new link for song (previous didnt play)

[ATLien666]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

Can you upload it in MP3 format or something?

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

the hulkshare thing doesnt play?

[ATLien666]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

now it does.

[Young Corruption]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

for a first song i would say you did way better than me and with no mic the quality isn't that bad, what did you use to mix/master with? the lyrics were alright nothing to special, some lines i did like and thought were good. You need to get more into it man. Show emotion, memorize the lyrics and record like you mean what you say and the song will sound a whole lot better. It take practice but in time you'll get it

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

for a first song i would say you did way better than me and with no mic the quality isn't that bad, what did you use to mix/master with? the lyrics were alright nothing to special, some lines i did like and thought were good. You need to get more into it man. Show emotion, memorize the lyrics and record like you mean what you say and the song will sound a whole lot better. It take practice but in time you'll get it

thank you for the feedback man! i need that to get better but ya im just startin out. i used garageband for mastering...more songs comin soon

[RaYZoR]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

first song? Not bad. First off Lyrics, it's so-so, The who remix was more like metaphors, mic quality isn't that bad, could hear you well, a bit loud though. I think that short remix should have been switched up a bit more with fast and slow bars. Also great beat selection, the version with the hook would have been better, it would have been a nice outro to make the beat fade out to.

Overall: 3/5
Would like to see you post more songs in the near future.

-RaYZoR

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

first song? Not bad. First off Lyrics, it's so-so, The who remix was more like metaphors, mic quality isn't that bad, could hear you well, a bit loud though. I think that short remix should have been switched up a bit more with fast and slow bars. Also great beat selection, the version with the hook would have been better, it would have been a nice outro to make the beat fade out to.

Overall: 3/5
Would like to see you post more songs in the near future.

-RaYZoR

thanks for the honest feedback i need that shit cuz im just startin out. you can look out for a couple songs that i got comin ive just been a lil busy today. i might drop a remix to November 18 by Drake today it will only hav one verse cuz im waitin on a guest verse from my friend

[mykill]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

Flow: C
Lyrics: C-

Overall: 2/5, I dont think its a good idea to use a line that blatantly uses an asian racial slur. Rhymes are really basic, but with a beat that Gucci Mane made famous, doesnt matter. My advice? Better mic presence. You sound like you're afraid to say anything. I dont know if you're recording with your parents in the next room or something, but you gotta sound more confident on the mic. Next, I'd try to explore more creative punches and throw in multis to make your lyrics a bit more interesting. If this is your first song, then good job. You didnt do bad for recording for the first time. Build on that, add some variance and depth into who you are as a rapper, and you'll go far and do well. Kudos.

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

Flow: C
Lyrics: C-

Overall: 2/5, I dont think its a good idea to use a line that blatantly uses an asian racial slur. Rhymes are really basic, but with a beat that Gucci Mane made famous, doesnt matter. My advice? Better mic presence. You sound like you're afraid to say anything. I dont know if you're recording with your parents in the next room or something, but you gotta sound more confident on the mic. Next, I'd try to explore more creative punches and throw in multis to make your lyrics a bit more interesting. If this is your first song, then good job. You didnt do bad for recording for the first time. Build on that, add some variance and depth into who you are as a rapper, and you'll go far and do well. Kudos.

as far as the asian thing i was recording with my asian friend when i made this so it was kinda a joke and he was chill with it...and funny story ya it wasnt my parents but i had to keep quiet so it probably didnt sound very charismatic because of that

[mykill]

Re: Lemonade (Merc Remix) first song

as far as the asian thing i was recording with my asian friend when i made this so it was kinda a joke and he was chill with it...and funny story ya it wasnt my parents but i had to keep quiet so it probably didnt sound very charismatic because of that

yeah dude, its good work regardless. just remember that even if you're friends are cool with it, there's always someone in the world that gets offended by stuff like that. There's a reason major label artists dont do it. I dont want to sound like a chastising father, but just remember that. Do what you please, but keep that little bit in mind. It's like the N-word being used by white dudes, who's black friends are cool with it. Somewhere, somebody'll get pissed at that.

you win in my book because you try. keep trying. use the grades as something to build on. getting A+ ratings from me isnt hard, just takes some polish and work lol. when you get your stuff straight, we can collab. that's the best way i learned to improve - competition. peace!