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    A lil something I came up on my freetime, oh and this is the first time I ever attempt to write a poem? so cut me some slack

    I tried to give you the world but you didnt take it
    have me feeling like theres something wrong with the way I tried to feel the sensation
    of you sitting by my side knowing you'll have my back through any bad situation
    that life throws at me, whether it be my fault or not
    I just wanted to hear your voice say it'll be ok, damn even a nod
    I guess that was too much to ask for from you
    Now im sitting here, planning my next move
    should I accept the pain and move on?
    Or keep fighting for the forbidden love that keeps putting your image in my head on and on
    throughout the day i try to carry on without daydreaming
    about the love we coulda had, and I just keep thinking
    If I still have a chance
    I swear girl you have me in a trance
    But I've been through this before
    Just a crush blown out of proportion, if I was any smarter I woulda backed away long before
    Atleast I tried, just don't come and complain to me when all the men you thought were good, screw you over once they get to 3rd base
    But that wouldn't have been our case
    The way I look into your eyes and tell it to your face,
    you can't tell me this is fake
    But oh well, just show me the gates
    out of your life, I wasted enough of my time
    trying to convince you, you should be mine but you treated it like a crime
    I should learn to read in between the lines

    I think it goes good with this beat http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PbmHqo5Op6g
    Last edited by joel147258; 10-01-2011, 08:16 PM.

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    no feedback??

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      gotta give to recieve..

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        Originally posted by lMonsterl View Post
        gotta give to recieve..
        alright then

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