RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

[MC_Crary]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Definitely sounds off the dome. See you've got a good man givin advice. Good luck.

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

google some stuff. read up on rhyme schemes and stuff like that. no sense in having a hobby, if you dont know anything about that hobby or how to do it. If freestyling is your thing, then keep it up by all means, but if you're gonna keep freestyling you gotta form way better bars. Saying fucker and muthafuck every other word isnt anything grand as far as rap goes. anyone can do that. until you come up with something that defines "Rayzor", stuff like that will keep going in one ear and out the other of the listener. you gotta give em some kind of substance to keep their attention. when you write, just write down what you want to say. what the music makes you feel. and if rhymes dont come to mind, you can write what you're thinking, then go back and try to come up with rhymes for it.

for instance, if you had a bad day, a dog pissed on your skate board, and your mom was hassling you about not taking the trash out, you could write it like this: "Days long and heavy / wake up but never ready / rain clouds come down but its just on me / man, fuck that puppy / stupid dog marked his spot / but it was on the top of my board / when it rains it pours, huh? / when is all this shit gonna stop? / step into the house and my ears gettin' rocked / my mom is on my case, all day, everyday / want it all to go away / get my earbuds and press play / dont give a fuck what you say / dont give a fuck anyways / i just listen to music then abuse my f'n pen to no end"

see?

thanks this will help. and that example really helped. Next track will be better thought out.