RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

[RaYZoR]

this song is completely freestyled. No written lyrics, that's why you can hear me repeating a few lines over and over because I needed a filler.
Anyways, rate & comment.

On the last verse I kinda lose run out of thoughts so its choppy

PLAY THE REMIX: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle).mp3
FREESTYLE ON THIS BEAT: CURREN$Y -Where Da Cash At Remix (Keep My Paper Runnin) (instrumental).mp3

I typed the freestyle lyrics out for your convenience.

(Shoutout)
(Intro)..Yeah!

(Hook)

Yeah
I be doin it every motherfuckin day
and I know most of you bitches only wanna hate
You keep reaching after my maafuckin money
and I know where you be, where da cash at honey?
I be like, fuck you bitch
you aint spending my money
I be working hard, for this fuckin shit
I run Instrumental KING, making money everyday
like its just paper fuckin to may
And I know Rick Ross agrees with me
Cause we think paper is just motherfuckin money
and money is just fuckin paper
so we don't fuckin care
if we burn or light that shit
everytime in the air
When we are high as motherfuckin fuck
and you prolly never even catch up right to us
Yeah swag so official, people wanna be
Like the RayZor and Ricky Rozay on the beat

(Hook)

Yeah, verse number two, back on this fuckin beat
making money as well as I fuckin speak
And I know most of you bitches will never catch up on my level
cause I'm higher than an kite and neva comin down
Swag so official people wanna be like me
but obviously them niggas can neva be
like the RayZor on the fuckin beat
better than you wack as bitches c-can ever be
That's the fact man, that's the truth
that's written in The Bible and you have no fuckin clue
uh
got the swag so official people wanna be like the RayZor
Like I be missin you nigga
but you prolly don't even know where I'm from
From big Chicago man, in the Land of Lincoln
You could probably even catch up even if you had the swwagger
RayZor on the beat drinkin that Lager

(Hook)

Like already told you two times before
I'm the motherfuckin Rayzor on the beat 2 4
You could probably neva, do it like me nigga
24/7 I am so icey nigga
People wanna be like tha RayZor on the fuckin beat
Keep My paper runnin everytime as I fuckin speak
I get paid by the letter ABC to Da EFG
HIJKLMNOP you niggas can't fuckin piss on me
cause I got swagga so official that people wanna be me
Swag so official, you can neva be
Like the RayZor on the mother fuckin ass beat
Swag so official, people wanna be me
but you obviously can neva ever fuckin beat
better than you wack as bitches can eva BE!

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[devinkeller2]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

You sound either really white or really 15 years old... not trying to be mean, but the "gangster" persona you went for doesnt go with your voice. overall it was ehh, the subject matter was just what i expect from rappers who dont rap about real shit, too much "swag so official" and i dont really believe its a freestyle. good attempt though, sorry for being so critical lol, 1.5/5

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Can I get this deleted, I meant to post this beat.

Pre-Spacely (prod. by RayZor)

So Spacely (prod. by RayZor)

[ATLien666]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

I can believe this was a freestyle, only because it wasn't that good, lyrically or flow wise.

Flow - 2/5

Lyrics - 1/5

Overall - 1.5/5

[mykill]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Flow: C
Lyrics: D-

Overall: 1.25/5, There were points where your flow dipped in volume. You gotta learn how to keep the same consistent tone in your voice and volume level. Sometimes you sounded too shy and I couldnt even understand what you were saying because you were mumbling too much. Lotta cliche lines in this freestyle, but I can't really knock u for that because there's cliche lines all throughout everyone's raps. (save the great lyricists) Its more expected on a track like this. Keep doing what you do and develop yourself more. The more tracks you make, the better you'll get. You did three verses on this, and not a lot of ppl can even do a 16. Suggestion: drop the N-word stuff. If you're a white rapper, it'll only come back to bite you.

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Flow: C
Lyrics: D-

Overall: 1.25/5, There were points where your flow dipped in volume. You gotta learn how to keep the same consistent tone in your voice and volume level. Sometimes you sounded too shy and I couldnt even understand what you were saying because you were mumbling too much. Lotta cliche lines in this freestyle, but I can't really knock u for that because there's cliche lines all throughout everyone's raps. (save the great lyricists) Its more expected on a track like this. Keep doing what you do and develop yourself more. The more tracks you make, the better you'll get. You did three verses on this, and not a lot of ppl can even do a 16. Suggestion: drop the N-word stuff. If you're a white rapper, it'll only come back to bite you.

I'm a person of color. my dad is black (from Sierra Leone) and my mother is Indian.
but of course there is no way you can know that, so I don't blame ya.

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I can believe this was a freestyle, only because it wasn't that good, lyrically or flow wise.

Flow - 2/5

Lyrics - 1/5

Overall - 1.5/5

...I don't know about you. but most freestyles are made on the spot. the term "freestyle" has changed throughout the last 2 decades, but it originally means to play a beat and rap whatever comes to mind....

This is a display of that.
Also since words like 'motherfuckin' have so many syllables, its the only filler I can think of as the beat plays.
This song wasn't redone. Honestly, I let idea flow thru and I say what comes to mind.

In this case I could only think of keep my paper running, and swag so official... LOL
but this was done on the spot and was blasted as hell during this mix.

I have like 50 songs that I've freestyled too.
And since I run Instrumental KING and discover so many new beats each day, its kinda hard not to want to rap.

[ATLien666]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

I'm a person of color. my dad is black (from Sierra Leone) and my mother is Indian.
but of course there is no way you can know that, so I don't blame ya.

---------- Post added at 04:50 PM ---------- Previous post was at 04:40 PM ----------



...I don't know about you. but most freestyles are made on the spot. the term "freestyle" has changed throughout the last 2 decades, but it originally means to play a beat and rap whatever comes to mind....

This is a display of that.
Also since words like 'motherfuckin' have so many syllables, its the only filler I can think of as the beat plays.
This song wasn't redone. Honestly, I let idea flow thru and I say what comes to mind.

In this case I could only think of keep my paper running, and swag so official... LOL
but this was done on the spot and was blasted as hell during this mix.

I have like 50 songs that I've freestyled too.
And since I run Instrumental KING and discover so many new beats each day, its kinda hard not to want to rap.

Okay, first off, I know what a freestyle is, but just because it's made on the spot doesn't mean it has to be terrible. If it's kinda hard not to want to rap, then write some shit instead.

[mykill]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

I'm a person of color. my dad is black (from Sierra Leone) and my mother is Indian.
but of course there is no way you can know that, so I don't blame ya.

Noted. They did the same thing to me when I first dropped songs. Anyway, take my comments and improve. We always enjoy "ACTIVE" members around here. Cheers.

[DilemmaHipHop]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

1/5 I kno you were goin off the top and shit but that was wack. Keep at it tho, Id say try to get your pen game up first and then you'll naturally have iller freestyles

[RaYZoR]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Okay so my with a pen at hand, like many ask...Where do I start? I normally can have the first 2-5 lines written, but then its hard to keep going. How do keep writing lyrics? Its easier for me to write essays than rhymes.

[THA GR8 M8]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Flow - Was definitely an off the dome type flow. You should started to feel the beat more throughout and switched it up and did a better flow though.
Lyrics - Not even bad for just going off the top for fun.
Other - Seems like people don't like it, but I respect it for what it is. You should start writing just so your rhymes are better and more thought out. But for just messing around and going off the dome, not bad.
Overall - 3.5/5.

[mykill]

Re: RayZor - Keep My Paper Runnin (Freestyle Remix)

Okay so my with a pen at hand, like many ask...Where do I start? I normally can have the first 2-5 lines written, but then its hard to keep going. How do keep writing lyrics? Its easier for me to write essays than rhymes.

google some stuff. read up on rhyme schemes and stuff like that. no sense in having a hobby, if you dont know anything about that hobby or how to do it. If freestyling is your thing, then keep it up by all means, but if you're gonna keep freestyling you gotta form way better bars. Saying fucker and muthafuck every other word isnt anything grand as far as rap goes. anyone can do that. until you come up with something that defines "Rayzor", stuff like that will keep going in one ear and out the other of the listener. you gotta give em some kind of substance to keep their attention. when you write, just write down what you want to say. what the music makes you feel. and if rhymes dont come to mind, you can write what you're thinking, then go back and try to come up with rhymes for it.

for instance, if you had a bad day, a dog pissed on your skate board, and your mom was hassling you about not taking the trash out, you could write it like this: "Days long and heavy / wake up but never ready / rain clouds come down but its just on me / man, fuck that puppy / stupid dog marked his spot / but it was on the top of my board / when it rains it pours, huh? / when is all this shit gonna stop? / step into the house and my ears gettin' rocked / my mom is on my case, all day, everyday / want it all to go away / get my earbuds and press play / dont give a fuck what you say / dont give a fuck anyways / i just listen to music then abuse my f'n pen to no end"

see?