November 18th (Merc Remix)

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

aight heres my nov 18 verse i was just kinda foolin around with yesterday with. the stuff i havnt uploaded yet is probs a lil better but please make sure to check it out. i only got one verse for now cuz im waitin on my friend to drop some bars.
Hulkshare.com November 18.mp3

Lyrics:
M-E-R-C yeah aint nobody reala
i just spit the truth and no i aint a killa
aint from the hood no i neva pull the trigga
but my street cred just gets bigga bigga bigga
yeah thats 3x bitch i got that multiplier
got bars for days i aint talkin butterfinga
still get payday at the end of the month
still makin money, no i wont even pause to front
never hit that blunt but im on a natural high
fasten your seatbelt we gonna hit the sky
oj simpson and some vodka but i never lie
party in the day im on my fourth of july shit
rip screw for now im reppin htown
got the crown, renown, now im shootin for the triple crown
on that syrup for the day so imma hav to take it down
on this shit im fearless so i neva have to back down

also heres my first song if you guys wanna check that out:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...irst-song.html

[mykill]

Re: November 18th (Merc Remix)

Flow: D
Lyrics: C

Overall: 2.25/5, Sounds decent from a technical aspect. Quality of the beat and lyrics are good, I would suggest though turning up the lyric volume. Add a decent level of reverb to that and your verse vocals would be on point. Lyrically, you gotta come a bit harder. Your flow fell off in this one compared to the other track you posted. Remember to stay on beat and spit like you're talking to your best friend from next door. Relax, make it all come out naturally and you'll have a great song on your hands. Keep up the good work.

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: November 18th (Merc Remix)

Flow: D
Lyrics: C

Overall: 2.25/5, Sounds decent from a technical aspect. Quality of the beat and lyrics are good, I would suggest though turning up the lyric volume. Add a decent level of reverb to that and your verse vocals would be on point. Lyrically, you gotta come a bit harder. Your flow fell off in this one compared to the other track you posted. Remember to stay on beat and spit like you're talking to your best friend from next door. Relax, make it all come out naturally and you'll have a great song on your hands. Keep up the good work.

honestly tho thanks for the feedback even though those are pretty bad grades im just happy people arent blowin smoke up my ass like they do for akkucc. but im not rlly offended cuz its not my best work but i agree i have to work on my flow and the lyrics arent that great its just kinda a chill song. and ya i tried to fuck with the mastering a little bit to see if making the music louder would make the track more energetic but that didnt really work

[mykill]

Re: November 18th (Merc Remix)

yeah you gotta get that "energetic" energy in the track from your vocals. Its one of my BIGGEST problems, is im too monotone for energetic tracks. all i can say is work on it dude. you'll get there soon

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: November 18th (Merc Remix)

yeah you gotta get that "energetic" energy in the track from your vocals. Its one of my BIGGEST problems, is im too monotone for energetic tracks. all i can say is work on it dude. you'll get there soon

aight ill definitely work on it. i think im gettin a mic soon and my friend is gonna dl fl studio and all that shit so now imma hav a studio goin. look out for some new shit

[TupacShaquer]

Re: November 18th (Merc Remix)

I Liked it but the lyrics was to low

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: November 18th (Merc Remix)

I Liked it but the lyrics was to low

k ill keep that in mind...btw im writin my verse right now for our collab ill try and get it to you soon man