Yung Cash - Untitled

[ATLien666]

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In their wildest dreams, they don't even wanna see a nigga succeed/
And if so, they'll be damned if that'll ever be me/
Fuck the haters and the critics/
With the whole world yellin', you can barely hear the crickets/
Some men just wanna see the world burn, I'm one/
When you see Heaven on fire, you'll know that I'm done/
No longer judgin' competition, that word is non-existent/
They barely get a listen... I won't even finish/
But I pay 'em no attention/
I'm through gettin' hype, man, I just gotten ruthless/
Spittin' like I'm all gums, nigga, I do this/
You'll be surprised how many niggas I'll eat toothless/
Gamblin' with danger, quick to leave you in debt/
and ya'll niggas ain't sick, we call that the "Placebo effect"/
I ball everywhere I go, that's that chemo effect/
Your girlfriend's favorite rapper, yeah, she loves me/
She might take it literal, when you say fuck me/
The way I blow her off, you'll think that I'm Al Bundy/
You think you're sharp? This is a knife; Crocodile Dundee/
I love the way she say my name, but I barely say hers/
and she still don't know what the name tag's for/
Her boyfriend don't know and I really don't care/
I can't be mad if I give 'em a reason to stare/
I'm insanely gifted, see; we're gonna need a bigger Christmas tree/
I hate braggin', but it's one of those bare necessities/
I come, fuck shit up, and leave; bear necessities/
Don't underestimate the underdog, push me up under a rug and I took it from up under ya'll/
Ya'll niggas watch the throne, I'm goin' for the crown/
they know I'm in this bitch, and she ain't had no ultrasounds/
Changed spots, had to reconsider my position/
now I gotta figure my decision/
For you to listen and to cut deep; lyrical incision/
Disregarding that I'm not ballin' and I've been rappin' for a minute/
Ironically, everybody's critic/
Now everybody did it?/
Stretched it so I can fit it?/
Cut me off before I finish/
To tell you that... yeah, uh, you bullshittin'/
These niggas that were supposedly "out of my league"/
Can hold my throne up for me and keep my dogs company/
You belong there, too, for thinking they could fuck with me/
Crazy when I'm doin' bad, they got love for me/
When you start doin' good, they decide to hate you/
Now I'm bringin' Max Payne and no Take-Two/
The girls I decide to dedicate myself to/
Get on both knees and medicate a mouthful/
Got numbers with hearts on papers, said I would save her, I don't even call her back/
I ain't got a girlfriend... just a girl that would be mad if she ever heard that/
Niggas swore I lost it or that I never had it/
Well, I either found it or I just performed magic/
How am I? basically fantastic, don't let it phase ya'/
You can't read between the lines, nigga, you're like Fantasia/
Excuse my mindless behavior, it gets like that at times/
I just speak my mind, sometimes it just lands on my rhymes/
No Apologies, nigga, but I'm sure you already knew/
My Monster told me to tell you, that yeah, he's comin' soon/
I'm Freddy Kruger in Martin Luther King's dream/
and everybody's a dream killer, it seems/
Well, tell the studio to lower the budget/
'Cause I'm 'bout to kill these niggas, they don't cut it/
I'm a Nightmare on Elm Street, you're a Leprechaun In The Hood, see/
I'm a classic... and well, you just wish you could be/
One, I'm so cold, I'm givin' myself brain freezes/
I'm like, NIGGA, do you see this?/
Fuck them fuck niggas and they borrowed flows/
This kid right here, got a monster in him like Naruto/
I'm lookin' for a girl to wife up, but I kinda got a thing for gorgeous sluts/
Nice breasts with a nice butt, kinda stuck up/
She kinda worth it, though/
No love 'cause... she don't deserve it, yo' #KanyeShrug/
Got 5 girls lined up, it's like I'm on Next, bitch/
I'm the future rapper you'll probably see up on your Netflix/
"So far out of my comfort zone" Nigga, what?/
You thought I only rapped about what, just girls and love?
Thinkin' to myself, like, do you see this, bitch?/
Goin' so hard, Ripley won't even believe this shit/


Monster coming soon.


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[DeezyMac]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

First time I've heard a song from you and I'm like "Woah Derr Boii, is this Big Sean's child?" Sound just like him. "Competition / That word is non existent" - BOII

But about the song....the lyrics were good, but the flow was off. Like, it sounds like instead of rapping over an instrumental, you put an instrumental over vocals and tried to match it up. Maybe it's just me but it sounds really off to me. And yes I can hear the fan in the back lol. But yea work on the flow and this would sound much more polished and neat.

3/5

[MC_Crary]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

This is honestly the most on I've heard your flow. Good job man. I've come to the conclusion that it's not you, when you record a track play with vocal file a bit. Move it slight left or right to see if it sounds more on beat to you. I'm pretty sure you use a usb mic like most of us here do, and the sometimes have delays in record time. I think that will help your tracks sound more on beat. The lyrics were pretty good though man, as you acknowledged in the lyrics, its a different style from you but I like it . Monster should be interesting.

[DilemmaHipHop]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

You have potential.. You just gotta clean up that flow. You have clear delivery, pretty good lyrics and concepts. Just get a dope flow and youre straight homie. 3/5

[akkucc]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

good one bro, like it.

[TupacShaquer]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

Flow : B
Lyrics : B
Overall : B

"For you to listen and to cut deep; lyrical incision"
Killed it

[mykill]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

Flow: C
Lyrics: B+

Overall: 3.75/5, Lyrics are on point for this one. MAC had some good advice for you. Try that. If it doesnt work, then you might need to get with someone and get some reference tracks to see how you're flow is off at some points. I mean its not BAD, but its off beat sometimes when you spit a verse. Sometimes it seems like you're rapping the bar quicker than you should or slower than you should. It reality I think we should be saying you need to work on your timing and then everything will be 100%. Fan doesnt seem like its really a problem on the vocals either. Stay on your G.R.I.N.D. lil' homie.

Monster coming soon, get ready biches.

[ATLien666]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

Thanks for the feedback! I'mma start perfecting my flow even more, and switching up. And I'mma definitely try some of the things MC said and try the reference song, too. Thanks for the tips!

[ThaMothafuckinCarter]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

i know everyone else has said this but your flow was off. you have such a clear delivery and i can tell ur lyrics are good but the flow just distracts me from everything else. keep workin on it homie

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

pretty good joint bro.

lyrics on point throughout, smooth beat, but obviously everybody already said the flow is the problem.
a chorus would've have been nice too, cuz it seemed to go on too long but wit better flow it'll prolly work out better without a chrous.
mastering sounds good.
other: everything else on point, your stress on words is good and emotion and all is nice. good shit.
didnt even notice the fan though lol.

---------- Post added at 05:01 PM ---------- Previous post was at 12:05 PM ----------

did you do 2 takes or change the equalization between the intro and start of the first verse cuz they sound different

[ATLien666]

Re: Yung Cash - Untitled

i know everyone else has said this but your flow was off. you have such a clear delivery and i can tell ur lyrics are good but the flow just distracts me from everything else. keep workin on it homie

right on, I'mma keep improving and hopefully perfect it before this mixtape drops.

pretty good joint bro.

lyrics on point throughout, smooth beat, but obviously everybody already said the flow is the problem.
a chorus would've have been nice too, cuz it seemed to go on too long but wit better flow it'll prolly work out better without a chrous.
mastering sounds good.
other: everything else on point, your stress on words is good and emotion and all is nice. good shit.
didnt even notice the fan though lol.

---------- Post added at 05:01 PM ---------- Previous post was at 12:05 PM ----------

did you do 2 takes or change the equalization between the intro and start of the first verse cuz they sound different

Right on, I've been practicing on my flow and shit recently, so hopefully I correct it and yeah, the intro was a whole 'nother take and I didn't EQ it or nothin'. lol.