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It's kind of a story I wrote about no one in particular, just a story still. Came up with this a few minutes ago, got four more bars left but this is what I got right now.
He told his momma, he was on a come up
She said if not, you going to school, no more extra summers
In his room, writing raps to beats from boi-wonder
All this idle talk ain't gone help him move these numbers
So he hit the streets and starting banging like a drummer
Always on the look out for them cops to run up
Selling Coke and Weed trynna buy a hummer
Not looking to the future to see what turns up
On the grind from the sun down to sun up
Got caught by the cops so he pulled his burner
Now he in jail, who gone raise his son up
To be the better man, never pick a gun up
Last four bars, are gonna be like a reflection on his actions, maybe a continuation of doing wrong and the second verse will be the reflection will an attempt at turning around, I don't know, I'm high, I'm just throwing out options right now. This is important for some reason to me, can I get some type of feedback on this please? Kinda hard to get better if no one takes the time to point out the mistakes..
He told his momma, he was on a come up
She said if not, you going to school, no more extra summers
In his room, writing raps to beats from boi-wonder
All this idle talk ain't gone help him move these numbers
So he hit the streets and starting banging like a drummer
Always on the look out for them cops to run up
Selling Coke and Weed trynna buy a hummer
Not looking to the future to see what turns up
On the grind from the sun down to sun up
Got caught by the cops so he pulled his burner
Now he in jail, who gone raise his son up
To be the better man, never pick a gun up
Last four bars, are gonna be like a reflection on his actions, maybe a continuation of doing wrong and the second verse will be the reflection will an attempt at turning around, I don't know, I'm high, I'm just throwing out options right now. This is important for some reason to me, can I get some type of feedback on this please? Kinda hard to get better if no one takes the time to point out the mistakes..
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